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Poseidon - Part IV

Friday, January 12, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. Inara is missing and Zoe hurt, and an old protagonist may be involved ... Please leave feedback and ratings - it makes the writing process easier!

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“Sir?” A young steward in smart livery approached the entrance to the alleyway, looking a little uncertain. “Are you Captain Reynolds?” he asked Hank.

“No, I am.” Mal sat forward into the light.

“Sir, Mr Malfrey requests you meet him at the rear entrance. Immediately, sir.”

“Why? What’s happened?” Mal stood up, and Jayne came out of the darkness, his hand on his gun.

“I don’t know, sir. That was the message I was to give you.” The young man gave Jayne a last look, and hurried away.

“Come on,” Mal said, heading out of the alley.

They skirted the ballroom, weaving amongst the vehicles waiting for those inside, and as they reached the rear of the building they saw Dillon’s hover set on the ground, doors open, unattended.

Jayne drew his gun.

They broke into a run as they saw Callum come out, something – or someone – in his arms, Dillon close behind.

“What the hell –“ Mal said, pulling up, then, “ Wuh de tyen, ah .”

“Zoe!” Hank cried, pushing past him and taking hold of her hand, gripping tightly.

“I think she’s been stabbed, but I don’t believe it’s as bad as I feared,” Dillon explained quickly. “But she needs to be seen by a doctor.”

“Got one right here,” Mal said, even as Simon moved to Zoe’s side. “Hank, move.”

His pilot glared at him but let go, stepping back only enough so that Simon could check Zoe’s vitals.

“Inside the hover,” he ordered, moving with Callum as he laid Zoe on one of the long seats, Hank scrambling in after them.

“The hospital isn’t too far –“ Dillon began, but Mal interrupted.

“No. Serenity.”

“Yes. Of course. By the way, your Companion seems to be missing,” Dillon said, aware this man was controlling pent-up rage.

“Missing?” Mal looked up at him sharply.

“I think Zoe probably followed, and got stabbed in the process. By whoever’s taken Inara, I imagine.”

Mal’s face tightened and he turned to Jayne. “Look for her. Go inside and search, and I don’t care if they make a fuss. Just do it. Then bring the mule back to Se

Comments
Friday, 12 January 2007 10:27
It would have been so nice if you could have just had the Captain show some tenderness towards Freya, the woman he love, the woman who is carrying their child. Instead I find myself likening him to Rance Burgess, only concerned about the baby she is carrying. I really hope that was not your intent. The story is shiny and I loved the inclusion of Sir Warwick Harrow and good that Dillon is going to help too. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 12 January 2007 11:36
To Amdobell: I had a different take on that, like Mal couldn't handle Freya losing the baby for Freya's sake, because of how important this miracle child is to both of them, not just him.


Loved Jayne here.
Friday, 12 January 2007 19:39
This is great - you are building up a story full of tension. Of course, Mal's stupidity at charging in guns blazing is not what I would call a good idea, but then again, he is our captain.

As far as Mal and Freya - I think he is showing concern. He knows if he uses the whole "You're not up to it" reasoning, she'll tell him that's a load of crap - the only leverage he has - and the only real concern, is the baby. And I agree with girlfan, it's about protecting both of them from that loss ... I don't think Freya would survive losing another one of Mal's children, especially a son.
Monday, 15 January 2007 04:32
Oh...this was freaking brilliant stuff, Jane0904! Definitely some Grade A dialogue and plot setup:D

Definitely wondering if Wing's too easy a patsy for this entire mess...less the Guild is using Wing as their little pawn for getting Inara back. Revoke his black mark with a promise that it was made by a Companion now seen as not stable or gone rogue and won't be held against him if he is the front man for "recovering" Inara...

BEB

P.S. Mal's being a bastard....but the right kind. Freya's all jumped up and paranoid due to hormones and the lingering bits of UST between Mal and Inara, so drugging her so she doesn't go off and either miscarry or get killed is a "right thing" scenario.A

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