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William Finds Serenity - Pt. 1

Monday, January 1, 2007

This is a fan fic I've been writing on and off for a while now. It takes place about eight months after the BDM. It is by no stretch of the imagination completion. I just thought I might post my initial part here to see what you all think. And just a forewarning, I am a fan of the “small ‘verse” mentality, so the new character, William, has had direct and indirect associations with the cast of Firefly and Serenity.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2412    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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William prepped his Harrion XM7 for entry into atmo. It had been awhile since he had been on Beaumonde; he just hoped Fanty and Mingo would have a customer lined up for his wares. Money was getting tight, and his ship wouldn't fuel itself. The ship jostled and the engine moaned as he broke the stratosphere and then bucked hard. "What in the bloody hell...?" William was cut off when a loud blast came from the rear engine and the ship bucked again. "Oh, juh jen sh guh kwai luh duh jean-jan..." William looked at the readouts and it was worse then he'd feared. Diagnostics showed that he'd lost a stabilizer and the catalyzer in the engine was fragged. He just hoped that there was enough life in her to get him to the ground.

The ship bucked again, knocking William around and sending the ship into a barrel roll. "Ching-wah tsao duh liou mahng!" William righted it and strained to engage the reverse thrusters before he crashed into the surface. He managed to land, albeit roughly, on the outskirts of one of the smaller villages. Beaumonde was a wealthy planet, but even it had some rural areas. William got out of his ship to take a look at the damage. The engine was slag; it was a solid lump of plasteel and wires. William was going nowhere in a hurry. "Well, ain't this just great?" It was dark; just on the verge of sunrise, so William took the opportunity to bury his cargo. It was nothing that would stand up to close inspection, but William guessed there wouldn't be a close inspection all the way out here.

William grabbed his pack and sealed his ship. He'd have to go into the city and see if he could sell what was left of it. "Any landing you can walk away from, eh sonny?" A man laughed from his porch as William entered the town.

"I ain’t your son old man, and I ain’t too keen on bein' the butt of no jokes either." William turned to keep walking.

"I ain't meant nothin' by it son." The man stood up. "But as it seems you're grounded, I was just tryin' to lighten you up is all." William stopped. "Listen, I gotta run into t

Comments
Monday, 01 January 2007 11:47
Great start, love it already! Can't wait to see where you go with this tale. I was surprised that William knew Book and had spent time in Southdown Abbey though. Your original character comes with quite a pedigree. Should make for interesting times. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
COUGARSOLO
Monday, 01 January 2007 14:53
Very well done! Looking forward to more :)

Take me out to the black, tell 'em I ain't commin' back.
Monday, 01 January 2007 17:10
Very interesting start - looking forward to reading more!
Monday, 01 January 2007 21:11
good characterization (post BDM) as seen from an OC's POV...keep posting I'm on winter break from the ball 'n chain (oh god, did I just say that...I mean to say my extremely rewarding career with the school district) so I'm on the prowl for interesting fiction.
Thursday, 04 January 2007 03:50
Wow...gotta hand it too ya, babywiththepower. William is quite the proficiently-written OC...though I initially was worried he was gonna be a Marty Stew instead of a fleshed out character;)

Can't wait to see how William continues to interect with the BDHs, and River especially. Will be interesting to see how those two start getting closer:D

BEB
Friday, 09 February 2007 11:21
Appreciate all the posative feedback. Because of a thread I read about story notes, I thought I'd mention that part 2 (for those that maybe didn't read it) can be found here: http://fireflyfans.net/sunroomitem.asp?i=14834
Friday, 23 February 2007 12:20
Gotta say man, I'm impressed. I know that this is a bit biased coming from me, but looks like you already got quite a lot of feedback from peeps you don't know. I wasn't expecting much coming into it, no offence, but other than you mentioning that you'd like to write something sometime I've never really seen you take an interest in somthing artistic for more than a few fleeting moments at a time. (Like the keyboard that I think you show signs that you could be really good at if you ever practiced)

I have to agree with the others about the character development here, and I think you did a real good job portraying the BDH's as well. I've never read any other fanfic before because I'm scared to see how bad the characters are butchered, but I think you did them justice.

I've got a great ability to imagine the characters and the scenes and the situations in my head very well if the author does a good job bringing them to you and bridging the gap and I think you've got that down really well considering this is your first story. Looking forward to reading your other stories and I hope you keep this up.

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