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Supplication and Fermentation

Tuesday, December 19, 2006

Blurry Mal done in layers and booze. - Set post-series. Rated PC for 'possibly confusing'.

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An experiment in Dopey Poetic Voice, written in February.

Mal.

Set post-series, pre-movie.

References to the whole series.

It's neither prayer nor confession nor nostalgia, but even if Mal knew what exactly it is, he likely wouldn't admit it.

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"Supplication and Fermentation"

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Malcolm Reynolds had impure relations with a whore.

Call the preacher, Mrs. Reynolds, your son has fallen into a life of sin.

(There's not soap enough in the 'verse.)

Dead men don't tell tales, Shepherd Brown. It's been (six weeks) seven years since my last confession.

(Don't tell Ma.)

I was sinning at the time.

There's filth clings to your soul, son.

(Something has to, preacher.)

Your daily recommended amount of dear and fluffy mockery is five. Seven when the Shepherd gets uppity.

(That's not you, Shepherd Brown.)

I honor the day of my crucifixion.

Your hands are fit to leave stains where they touch. Turned away from what cleanses.

Got buried to the elbow in human dissolution.

There's chains enough to hold you down.

...underwater, like to drown.

(Here we go.)

Mal has always been a clown.

Wears his bitter thorny crown.

Drag the tale about the town.

Make your pious elders frown.

(Run out, son?)

Thank you kindly, Shepherd Brown.

Mal Reynolds is the product of fornication out of wedlock. Can't no good come of it. (Daddy didn't want me enough to stay.)

(Malcolm Reynolds is a bigot.)

(What's the point of exceptions?)

I murdered (four thousand) twenty-five men and I don't think they all deserved it.

(Are you sorry?)

(I sold my rosary for a drink on Paquin.)

Malcolm Reynolds had impure relations with a whore, even though he got married by accident.

She never wore a wedding gown.

(Shut up, son.)

(I miss you, preacher.)

Best take of my career was a plastic gun don't even work.

(God forgives.)

(I don't.)

Malcolm Reynolds has not born false wit

Comments
AWINDSOR
Tuesday, 19 December 2006 15:32
Amazing.
It was confusing only in a way that made it good, that made the reader as disoriented as Mal is. I really truly enjoyed this.
Tuesday, 19 December 2006 15:47
I agree with AWindsor - it was confusing, but for all the right reasons. It is definitely open to interpretaion, which in my estimation is the mark of a good poem.
Tuesday, 19 December 2006 17:09
I enjoyed this. It was confusing in a drunken-stream-of-consciousness way, which is what you were going for, right? Very cool and different. I hope you post another one.
Tuesday, 19 December 2006 19:38
Yep...utterly amazing in the most "drunk out of one's gourd" mindset of inebriation;D

BEB
Wednesday, 20 December 2006 07:56
Thank you, all of you. :) I'm very relieved to know that it works. Something about Mal's layered mess of a mind just lends itself to quirky structure, but it's one thing to have it in one's head and another to translate it page-wise, so.. whew!

Thank you for reviewing!
Wednesday, 17 October 2007 08:52
ah, i liked this - enjoyed the line about confession coz it reminded me of the Inara/Book scene in the Pilot - she's kinda mary magdelene in that bit...

in any case - i loves me a fractured style - really wish i'd cottoned on to you sooner. "I honor the day of my crucifixion.

Your hands are fit to leave stains where they touch. " tasty.

and you did the whole thing with humour too.
Friday, 09 November 2007 04:07
"I honor the day of my crucifixion.

Your hands are fit to leave stains where they touch. "

I'm with Wytchcroft -- that's a lovely, lovely line.

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