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Lost - Part II

Thursday, December 7, 2006

Who is the girl? Why was she beaten and abandoned? I'm still not quite sure where this is going, but my muse tells me it's gonna be interesting! Please let me know what you think.

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The women were waiting as Hank brought the shuttle in, barely having docked before Simon had the door open.

“Honey, do you have –“

Kaylee held out the stretcher and he smiled. “Thanks.” He disappeared back inside and a minute later Jayne came out backwards, manoeuvring the girl through the hatch. Mal had the other end, and Simon was at her side.

“Get the infirmary ready,” Mal said to Freya, who nodded and ran off down the steps.

“Who is she?” Inara asked, looking down at the teenage girl’s face as she was carried past.

“She’s got no ident on her,” Hank said, coming out of the shuttle. “Nothing except this.” He held out a small piece of metal. “No idea what it is.” He hurried down the steps.

Inara took it, turning it over in her fingers, then glanced sharply at Jayne and Mal lifting the stretcher carefully down the last few steps towards the infirmary.

Zoe looked at the Companion. “Do you recognise it?” she asked.

“I … don’t think so,” Inara said slowly, handing it over.

Zoe looked at it lying in the palm of her hand, an oblong of dull grey, the numbers 9503 inscribed on one side, and some form of glyph on the other. “A dog tag?”

“Maybe. Probably.” Inara flashed a smile and followed the others.

“Don’t you believe her?” Kaylee asked, standing close to Serenity’s first mate.

“Not sure,” Zoe admitted. She glanced at River. “Can you pick anything up?”

River shook her head. “Not from either of them. But Inara’s been practicing.”

“Practicing?”

“Building walls to keep me out.” River wasn’t embarrassed in any way, just stating the facts.

“You can do that?”

“I can teach you if you want.”

“Do I have things I don’t want you to read?”

“Hank …”

Zoe glared at her while Kaylee stifled a giggle.

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Freya scrubbed up to help Simon, while Mal stood in the corner, ready to assist when needed.

“I don’t know how she survived as long as she has,” the young medic said, looking at the scans. “She’s got severe bruising internally, some bleeding … I’ll n

Comments
Thursday, 07 December 2006 17:42
I know this is still setting up the story to some degree ... but doesn't anyone have any feedback?
Thursday, 07 December 2006 18:21
Well, I liked it :) I\'m really bad at giving good, constructive feedback so I hope it\'s ok if I just pop in and say that I liked the chapter.

It will be very interesting to see where the story will go after this chapter.





Thursday, 07 December 2006 18:21
Well, I liked it :) I\'m really bad at giving good, constructive feedback so I hope it\'s ok if I just pop in and say that I liked the chapter.

It will be very interesting to see where the story will go after this chapter.





Thursday, 07 December 2006 23:19
Oh...I'm getting the feeling that the BDHs have just rode to the rescue of another fine and feisty lady named Chang. Though I guess the father was a tad bit more fairhaired than Nandi;)

Still...not sure who I support in the perspective war between Mal's usual condemnation of the Guild and Inara's support of it. Mal was harsher than necessary...but I can't see Inara blindly supporting such barbaric practices as complete shunning and possibly second degree murder (if the Guild or someone hired by them left the mystery woman to rot).

BEB
Friday, 08 December 2006 01:51
Whoever the poor girl is I have to wonder if it really was pure chance that Mal and co found her when they did. Inara recognising the girl was obvious from her first glimpse of the poor woman but is it just the girl being punished or was dumping her on that rock a warning for Inara as well? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 13 December 2006 05:02
Remember, a lot of us were at Flan this weekend, so the feedback may be a little long in coming!

But I really, really loved this. I think the mystery you've got around the girl is great and I love your take on the Companion's Guild and some of their rules.

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