Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Commitment - Part V

Monday, December 4, 2006

Does everything end happily? Please leave feedback, even if you didn't like this series.

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Kaylee’s knock echoed through the house, and from inside she could hear a dog barking, and a man shouting at it to be quiet. A woman’s voice joined in, and suddenly the door opened. A man stood there, dressed only in his pants and a vest.

“Kaywinnet Lee Frye?” he said, a smile appearing on his face. “Is that you?”

“That it is, Mr Buchanan,” Kaylee said, trying to look cheerful.

“How are you doing, girl? Heard tell you were coming home for a visit.”

“Frank, put a shirt on!” came the woman’s voice from inside.

“It’s only Kaylee,” he called. “You remember?”

He was joined by a woman in a floral dress, wiping her hands on a cloth. “Kaylee? My, it’s good to see you again!” She leaned over and planted a kiss on the young mechanic’s cheek.

“You too, Mrs Buchanan.”

“So you planning on staying a while?”

“Only a day or two.” Kaylee licked suddenly dry lips. “I was wondering, is Dray around?”

“No, dear,” Frank Buchanan said. “He moved out coupla years ago. Got himself a job in one of the factories other side of town, and decided it was too far to travel every day. Rents a small place, just a coupla rooms in a house, but he seems happy enough.”

“Oh. He … he didn’t marry then?”

“No, that he didn’t,” Mrs Buchanan said. “And there’s Frank and me wanting grandkids.”

“Hush, Lilian. You know he ain’t never shown any interest in providing any.”

Lilian Buchanan sighed. “You should have stayed around, Kaylee. Maybe you and he could have made a go of it.”

“I had to leave,” Kaylee said. “Got a job, and -”

“Course she did, Lily.” Mr Buchanan scolded his wife lightly. “Hell, if I’d got the offer of a job to go somewhere else when I was Kaylee’s age, you wouldn’t’a seen my ass for dust.”

“Frank!”

He grinned, then looked back at Kaylee. “I reckon he’d like to see you, though. Want me to call him for you? I’m sure he’d come by.” He hooked his arm around his wife’s waist. “Be a good excuse to make him drop in and see us too.”

“Um …” Kaylee glanced back at Freya

Comments
Monday, 04 December 2006 13:36
superb
Monday, 04 December 2006 16:26
This was a good ending. I had a feeling Dray and Simon were playing a "joke" on Kaylee - albeit not a very nice one. And that Mal of course, concocted it!

Jayne's line at the end was priceless.

So what's on tap for our intrepid crew?
Monday, 04 December 2006 16:38
Ouch. I knew as soon as Simon offered to fight someone that they were up to something, and when Mal was giving out speeches that he was the instigator. I was hoping for Simon to maybe take the high road here - because now that he's been mean, too, it gives Kaylee ammo to deflect them from the root of the problem - but I have to admit it was funny. And cruel. And just the thing Mal would suggest.

And can we duct tape River's mouth? She's always interjecting things at the wrong time...
Monday, 04 December 2006 23:00
Ya know...I actually believed Simon was pissed enough to fight for Kaylee's honour. He is Core-bred, so defence of honour duels would be a concept he's been raised to see as occasionally necessary. And he is willing to put himself in harm's way to protect those he cares about (see "Serenity" (pilot ep. and BDM), "Safe," and "Out of Gas"). Also...Simon's human. He's perfectly entitled to be mean, but it admittedly doesn't get to the root of the matter: Kaylee was and is still not capable of causing hurt (even if it's beneficial in the long-term) to someone she cares about.

Still...brilliant work here, Jane0904! Definitely loved the great plot twist of having Kaylee visit Dray's parents and get them to arrange a meeting for the next day (seemingly putting off the confrontation till the next day) and then have Dray be at the Fryes';D

BEB

P.S. I did find Hank and Zoe's conversation about what the crew of Serenity were to be kinda odd. Zoe never seemed to display any delusional thoughts on what she, Mal and Jayne did concering work most of the time during the series and movie. I wonder if she does think of the BDHs as being Robin Hood-like figures, since all the jobs canonically discussed or shown have screwed the Alliance over in one way another...
Monday, 04 December 2006 23:22
I didn't realise Simon and Dray were playing a joke on Kaylee for not being honest with them so the whole fighting it out in the street scene surprised me. Very glad Freya seems to have forgiven Mal for his part in it and I chuckled at their conversation about Alice. I can see him being the overly protective and worrying father, lucky he'll have Frey to lighten him up. And Simon proposed, loved it to bits! Yeah, do we get to see the wedding next? And River, absolutely perfect. Ali D :~)
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