Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Commitment - Part IV

Sunday, December 3, 2006

Zoe and Hank are getting closer, and Kaylee is starting to wonder why she was such a coward. Feedback, please, as ever.

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“Are you sure you’re not pretending?” Zoe asked, kneeling next to Hank who was lying on the floor, sweating and panting.

“Do I look like I’m pretending?” He closed his eyes, but the darkness just made it worse.

“Just take deep breaths.”

“But that’ll use the air quicker!”

“We’re not going to run out of air,” Zoe assured him. “And you need to calm down.”

“Calm? Calm?” He sat up and glared at her. “We’re locked inside a damn refrigerator and you’re telling me to calm down?” He lay back, pulling at his shirt. “There’s too many people. I can’t breathe …”

Zoe laid down next to him, wrapping her arms around him. “Just listen to my voice. I'm here. I ain't going anywhere. Just listen to my voice and feel my body. Concentrate on that.”

“You think that’s gonna help?” Hank asked, one part of his mind telling him he should be enjoying this moment, but the rest was just trying not to fall off the floor.

“Try.”

He did what she said, attempting to slow the heart hammering inside his chest, the raggedness of his breath, the feeling that the walls were closing in, the ceiling coming down to crush his body into a thin smear of something disgusting …

“You’re not relaxing,” Zoe said.

“You noticed.”

“Tell me why.”

“What?”

She started to stroke his arm with her hand. “Tell me why you’re afraid.”

“What, that I’m gonna die in here?” He threw out a brief laugh. “Kinda obvious. Don’tcha think?”

Zoe moved her hand to his chest, wrapping one leg over his, ignoring the stares of the other people in the cold room. He glanced at her, but only saw concern, willing him to take back control. “What happened to make you afraid?”

He nodded. “Long time ago.”

“Tell me.”

“I was fourteen, nearly fifteen. My voice had barely broken, but everything else seemed to be working fine …”

“So what do you think of her?” Marv asked, tossing his apple into the air before biting down on it.

“What, about Lucy?” Hank sat down on a fallen tree and pulled off his boot, searching insi

Comments
Sunday, 03 December 2006 17:12
Hmm...gotta admit I sympathize with Hank quite a bit...though I latched on to the plan when Lucy started buttering him up outside;)

And why do I get the feeling that Kaylee will knock, and the door will be answered by Dray's wife or one of his passel of kids? Cliche warning, maybe? Nah...I got faith you can plot twist;)

BEB
Sunday, 03 December 2006 19:11
I sure hope the door isn't answered by a wife or kid. It'd let Kaylee off the hook - "oh, you got married? Well, I'll just be going" - or at least force Freya to lean on her something fierce. Better, I think, to make Kaylee fess up then realize that she hasn't really harmed the guy.

Poor Hank. And being a gentleman, he can't even hit Lucy or retaliate at all. Good on Zoe for making sure he knows he's not a wuss.
Sunday, 03 December 2006 19:37
I loved the way Zoe handled Hank's panicking, it was perfectly in character for them both.

I agree I don't think it would be fair for Dray to have moved on, Kaylee needs to own up to what she did ... but it will be immensely sad if Dray has waited all this time for her ... I would think after the first year of no word from Kaylee, he would have gotten the hint ...
Sunday, 03 December 2006 23:38
I really thought the whole claustrophobia storyline was beautifully handled and loved how Zoe dealt with Hank, giving him someone to cling to as well as encouraging him passed his panic. As for Kaylee, I hope she gets to see Dray face to face and just tell him the truth. If he has married or found someone else in the meantime I hope that doesn't come out until AFTER she has fessed up. Kaylee needs to do this not just for her but for her future with Simon and Bethany. Ali D :~)
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