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Those Left Behind: Conclusion

Friday, July 2, 2004

Safety and Epilogue

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Chapter 11: Safety

Chinese Glossary

Fei hua – crap talk

Everyone breathed a sigh of relief as they dropped the unconscious bodies gently onto the deck of the Expeditor. The other two shuttles had left safely under the fighter craft's watchful protection. The lack of additional targets had caused the boarding of the last party to be a bit more eventful. "Zoe, Monty, go see if Wash needs help getting this boat in the air," Mal ordered.

Cecil was already attending to his sister while Simon worked over Jayne's body. The kids stood eerily still wherever they'd stopped. Zoe and Monty had to push most of them through the facility's corridors during their hasty retreat. Hopefully all were accounted for because Mal had no intention of returning to look for secret passages.

"Any clues as to what in the hell happened back there?" Mal asked Simon quietly. Simon glanced up from his work briefly, shaking his head. "What about them? What's wrong with them?" Cecil looked up as he started to register the conversation around him.

"I won't know for sure until I can get them to the infirmary. Whatever it is, it's unlike what happened to the other men," Simon explained. "No evidence of aneurysm or hemorrhage in either. I'm starting to think he was just hurting them."

Cecil's face wrinkled in a puzzled expression. "But why would he want to hurt 'em? He wouldn't know them from Adam."

Mal was equally puzzled as he stared at the unconscious forms. He looked up when Simon spoke again. "Jayne went first. Sug went down only after she went forward to stop him."

Mal's eyes widened as he considered the implications.

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In the cockpit, Zoe relieved Rusk of his position of co-pilot. "Having fun sweet cakes?"

Wash shot her a saucy grin. "Think we can get Mal to buy one of these babies?" he asked.

--

After landing on the asteroid that had been designated for the final rendezvous, Jayn

Comments
Friday, 02 July 2004 06:45
So... I want a sequel! Just pick up where you left off and take us off on a new adventure. You gave some nice set-up between Mal & Zoe, and Mal & the Shepherd, like to see where you take those.

Thanks for a very enjoyable story, well written, and well concluded.
Friday, 02 July 2004 09:11
BRAVO!!!! Love the added emotional/mental torture you piled onto Mal. Always saw him as someone who would pile things like that up. Hefting the world's or 'verse's problems on his shoulders and suffer it alone. I loved it through and through Jebby. Awesome work... keep em coming!!!
Friday, 02 July 2004 12:28
This was so damn *meili* I didn't want it to end! Loved it from start to finish and was very pleased you gave Mal some closure from River. There does seem to be a wealth of unspoken, almost intuitive, understanding between them. Good also to see that Wash is learning how to be more patient with Zoe when she is worrying about her Captain. So very shiny, *xie xie ni*, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 02 July 2004 13:33
I, too, want you to write more. This was very rewarding, but then, how could I resist a good story with my favorite characters and a neat ship?
Friday, 02 July 2004 15:39
everyone wants sequels while i'm basking in the doneness;) RL looks to be busy for a month or so, so don't hold your breaths waiting. Slightly considering the option of a sequel of some type, but well, also have 3 stories languishing on the boards still so may be a while.

Glad to know everyone enjoyed it so much though.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 08 July 2004 17:27
Bravo! Bravo! ~claps hands~

Well, jebbypal this has certainaly been a treat and a wonderful story. Loved the twist you pulled with Sue and Danny, so sad yet chillin' in it's own way. And poor Mal, great job on dealing with his 'guilt' at not being able to save Sue per say, and Danny. Your handle with his character always blows my socks off, since I get the uncanny feeling I'm seeing the show again. Nice touch, and I forgot to mention in the last review...your Wash rocks. Got a good laugh when he was flying the new plane, scaring the co-pilot. Very Washy. ~LOL~

Ok, seems I'm about caught up now, unto Wen's then. BTw, just so you know, I'm hoping a bunnie will sneak into your brain for a sequel, when your not so busy that is. Great, great introduction of original characters, wonderful job throughout the whole story!

Bravo and Brava!
Cassie E

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