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Thursday, November 2, 2006

On their way back to Prometheus for the wedding, Serenity's crew have run into trouble ... follows on from NEW START in the Mal/Freya thread. Please leave feedback as it is gratefully received!

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3388    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Serenity flew through the canyons as if the devil himself were after her, which for the crew was almost the case. The other ship was close, its pilot almost as good as Hank, who forced the Firefly into ever tighter turns, her artificial gravity fighting the real thing until everyone felt nauseous.

“Hank …” Mal said, pointing out of the window.

“I see it!” Hank pulled Serenity up, away from the sharp jagged spike that would have torn out her belly, then pushed hard on the controls. “Is Freya ready?” he asked, not taking his eyes off the canyon walls zipping past outside.

“Frey? You done?” Mal said into the comlink.

“Ready to go. Open the hold doors when you’re ready.” Freya’s voice came over the link.

“Hank.” Mal looked at his pilot.

“Get ready,” Hank said. Mal stood, hand poised over the door control as Hank fought the bucking ship. “Now!”

Mal slammed down on the control, and the hold doors opened, dropping half a dozen small barrels into the air. Hank pushed forward on the stick, getting that one last spurt of speed from the engine as the barrels seemed to float on their air cushions.

Zoe, watching the rear vid, gazed at the image of the marauding ship coming up fast, its laser cannon being brought to bear. “Sir …” she said.

“Hold on.” Hank threw Serenity into a fast climb, and they all had to grab something to avoid being hurled back across the bridge. Gripping the console, Zoe saw the marauder hit one of the barrels.

The explosion knocked the Firefly down, swatting it like a bug, making Hank swear as he tried to bring her back under control before she tore herself apart on the landscape.

“Hank, now would be a good time to prove you’re not a waste of money,” Mal said, holding onto the back of his chair, watching said landscape swirling crazily past the window.

“Working on it, Mal.” The tendons were standing out on his neck, the muscles bulging in his arms as he tried physically to make Serenity behave, and it was working. Slowly she responded, and slowed in her

Comments
Thursday, 02 November 2006 12:32
Just love this story and so glad that Mal and Freya are talking about the lost baby and that Inara had the good grace to slip out of the infirmary to give them some privacy. This is going to be hard on all the crew but you write so beautifully and poor Kaylee being upset for Freya's loss and reminded of it everytime her own baby kicks. I also loved the flashback filling in bits of backstory we would otherwise never have known. Neat. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 02 November 2006 14:58
So sad ... but beautifully written! I just love it.
Thursday, 02 November 2006 15:02
Wow. I sure as hell didn't see that coming.

That pulled pretty damn strongly at the heartstrings. Damnit! Why'd the baby have to die?! That's so unfair, but then, that's what makes it so true and real.

It was so sweet that they named the baby, and that Inara was the one to help Freya in the way she did. It was sweet, but bittersweet.

The structure of this piece is amazing, as AMDOBELL pointed out. The way you've worked in the flashbacks is nigh on perfect. And the last one... no words, it was that good.
Saturday, 04 November 2006 03:19
I am honestly in awe of your writing skills here, Jane0904...mainly because like the mob says, the level of quality angst and narrative flourishes done via the flashbacks really give us a wonderfully full look at how Freya interacted with Mal and his "ladies":D

BEB

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