Mal rolled over in his cramped bunk, he had a thumping headache and a hazy memory. No doubt caused by the results of Kaylee’s inter-engine fermentation system, but there was something else, something even foggier, but what?
“What Was That?”
****
Inara lay in her silken sheeted bed, her raven black hair splayed out across the red satin pillow. She was warm but not quite as cosy as she normally was and as she struggled to wake from her from her drunken sleep she vaguely wondered why the bedding was rougher than usual and why there was something holding her down.
****
Mal opened his eyes and looked slowly down at the woman he had been cradling protectively in his arms as they slept.
****
Inara opened her eyes and looked down at the two strong brown arms that were wrapped about her, holding her close. She turned her head to look at the man who was holding her so tight and safe yet so gently.
“ARGGGGHHHHH!”
*****
A peal of laughter rang out from the galley where Kaylee and Zoe were sat eating Breakfast together, trying to guess what was happening down in Mal’s bunk.
“Still it’d be real Shiny if something did happen” chirped the bubbly mechanic.
“Mite give Cap’n sum’thn to be happy about, make him loosen up”
“Yep” agreed Zoe nodding
“’Ain’t likely it did though, they’re both too stubborn”
Heavy footsteps sounded as Jayne entered the galley closely followed by Simon who lowered himself gingerly into the empty chair beside Kaylee.
“Awww ya suff’rin bad hun?” She asked kissing his sore head.
“I need coffee” he groaned rubbing his temples
“Comin’ rite up” she said bounding up to go and make some.
“How come’s your’ both so gorram shiny anyhow?” Asked Jayne suspiciously.
“Because we didn’t have any” said Zoe smugly.
“Had to trick the Cap’n and ‘nara remember?” Added Kaylee.
“I think Jayne may have passed out by then” Zoe said smiling at him, Jayne glared and tried to answer but choked on his mouthful of food instead.
“Speaking of the Captain and Inara do we know the results of that particular,
Give us a follow up! Must have more!
Give us a follow up! Must have more!
However - you really need to look into your punctuation and capitalization. Mistakes like this - and you have lots of them! - will turn readers off from what is really a fun little ditty. You might want to get a beta reader to help you fix things - check this thread for volunteers:
http://www.fireflyfans.net/thread.asp?b=2&t=20967
You can't take the sky from me
:D
BEB
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