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Brothers - Part VII

Monday, October 30, 2006

The conclusion. Mal has been captured because of Vinnie's betrayal, and Serenity is landlocked ... Please let me know what you think, good or bad, particularly as this is the first long story I've done!

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The explosion sent dust and grit everywhere, and Simon could taste it in his mouth, even with his arm covering his face. As the sound died away he looked up at Hank, who was grinning.

“They’re gonna be running every which way,” the pilot said, slapping his ears with the palms of his hands to clear the ringing.

“Let’s just hope Jayne uses it to his advantage,” Simon replied, doing the same.

There was shouting from one of the tunnels. “I think they might have figured the pacifiers are down,” Hank added, his grin, if possible, getting wider. “Should give them a chance.” Then different sounds, these much sharper, harder, and Hank’s smile faded. “Or maybe not.”

“Come on. We need to get back.” Simon tugged gently on the pilot’s sleeve, and Hank reluctantly turned to follow.

---

“What the hell is going on?” the man in the suit asked, turning, expecting to see one of the guards from outside.

Instead it was a blue tinted demon, dusted ultramarine, who had burst into the room. “Looking for Mal Reynolds,” it said. “’N’ I ain't inclined to wait for an answer.”

The man reached for the emergency button, to call for help but Jayne was too fast for him. He crossed the floor in a split, grabbing the man and lifting him from his feet, leaning hard against the wall.

“Looks like blood on the floor to me. Fresh too,” Jayne said conversationally. “Don’t seem to be yours, so I’m gonna make a leap here and say it’s his.”

“The guards will be back soon,” the man said, his voice trembling to match the shaking of his body. “They’ll –“

“You think?” Jayne asked. “I’d’a said they were too busy putting down the little uprising that’s going on out there. What with those pacifiers bein’ down. And you ain't answered my question.”

“I don’t know what you’re –“

Jayne held him up with one hand, reaching to the bandoleer around his chest. “Where is he?” he asked again. “And if I don’t get the answer I need, you’ll be eating this grenade.”

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Mal woke up with the taste of blood and dust in his

Comments
Monday, 30 October 2006 12:01
Love this! You know I was half expecting Vinnie to do something to redeem himself for betraying Mal so when he took that bullet at the end it felt right. Kind of washing away the sin of what he had done in a moment of brotherly weakness. And I absolutely loved the women sorting out that *tamade hundan* Leon until he called off his dogs and let them go. Oh yeah, mess with Serenity's men and you'll get more than you bargained for but mess with her women and you'll burn in every one of the nine hells! Kind of has a poetry to it. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 30 October 2006 21:43
This was a great ending, very fitting for the entire story! I love Zoe and Freya and Inara refusing to back down - Mal certainly is one lucky SOB to have women like that looking out for him.
Wednesday, 01 November 2006 18:19
Damn...suddenly things become a lot clearer for Mal's reasoning behind making an attempt at rescuing Harry. Should have known that Vinnie and Harry were cousins;)

Still...mighty shiny work you've done here, Jane0904!

BEB
Friday, 06 July 2007 20:29
I loved this brothers twist and the fact that they turned out to be related to Mal, what I fantastic twist.
Friday, 06 July 2007 20:31
Sorry, discovered I can't string a sentence when I get excited. Loved the Brothers saga thing, meant to say. I'll go back to dribbling now.

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