A NEW LOVE
Monday, October 30, 2006
Sequel to A NEW REASON - Set 12 years after the "NEW" series of stories. Children grow up, but unfortunately their parents don't always follow suit. S/K, M/I, R/J, Daniel, Mimi
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3718 RATING: 9.0 (G) SERIES: FIREFLY
A/N: This is the last stories in the "NEW" series, following 12 years after A NEW REASON.
I wrote this for two main reasons:
1) Overprotective Mal/Father is fun to write.
2) I had a massive crush on my childhood best friend and always thought we'd be perfect for each other. (Alas, we're not, but it's still the fantasy!)
Please let me know what you think!
Also, my beta Leiasky has been swamped lately, so I took a look at this one myself. Any mistakes are mine!
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A NEW LOVE
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With downcast eyes and a contrite expression, Mimi watched her father pace an anxious path across the room. He had been like this, pacing and glaring at her, for a good ten minutes. Occasionally, he would stop and open his mouth as if to say something and then just as quickly shut it again and continue to pace. Her mother had tried to get him to calm down, but when her concerned statement only garnered a fiercer scowl even she remained silent.
Finally pausing, Malcolm Reynolds, captain of Serenity and father to two teenage daughters, rose to his full height and began to speak.
"I don't even know where to begin" he said evenly, struggling to keep his anger in check. "Not only did I catch you kissin' a boy in them woods, but he's older than you."
As Mimi opened her mouth to protest, her mother's light hand to her arm made her pause. Meeting her mom's warm gaze, Mimi caught the silent warning and remained quiet.
"And," Mal went on, his argument gaining momentum as he was allowed to talk uninterrupted. "Not only were you kissin' a boy, an older boy, you was kissin' Daniel. A boy I near helped raise."
"Daddy," Mimi whined, her big brown eyes gazing up at him. "If you would just-"
"Oh no," Mal said, taking a step away from her and clapping his hands over his ears. "I don't wanna hear none o' your feminine logic."
Frowning at him, Mimi turned her imploring gaze to her mother, tears pooling in her eyes at the unfairness of it all.
Squeezing her daughter's hand re
On a grammatical note, since you didnt have a beta, the passage...
Not bothering to look back to her mom, she said softly, “I love him.”.......
.... Continuing to finger her daughter’s curls, Inara asked gently, “Are you? Are you really?”
shouldnt that say either "I am in love with him"....“Are you? Are you really?”
OR “I love him.”..."Do you? Do you really?"
Just a thought....
Shame this is the last one, looking forward to a new series from you soon
Thanks for sharing
I loved the reactions, they were so right for the characters.
You can't take the sky from me
My favorite had to be the 'wiles' portion as well as Mal and Simon's conversation.
It's good to see that there is a happily ever after for the crew we know and love - even if Mal and Simon don't think so right at this moment. Heh!
~ Saying this to both Kaylee and Daniel was so very funny
Remnants of her companion training that had come in quite handy as a parent
~ I can see her training in reading people coming very much in handy with teenage children
Of course, there were a couple of challenges he probably should have backed down from, but still
~ Good description of Mal, especially from his own daughter
“We’re not having sex.”
Thank God Mal wasn’t here for that, Inara thought.
~ Just thinking about his precious little girl doing that would definitely put him in more or less a killing mood
Very good Mal-as-overprotective-father story, I liked it.
I so can picture Mal just going up and harkening back to his earlier days (BDS era) of getting completely wound up when something's gone wonky and he's on edge:D
Kinda disappointed though that River and her daughters couldn't join in on the fun for this. Would have made for some interesting commentary to have three Readers (cuz I am gonna assume that Maddy will be like her mom and big sister with the freaky mind powers and all;D) laying out some frank wisdom to Mal, Daniel and Mimi;)
BEB
“Just be thankful you’ll only have to go through it one more time.” Holding up his hand, Simon said, “I’ve still got four more to go.”
That was bloody brilliant!!!
LOL!!!
I very much loved this story and I'm sad to see it go. But alas, we must move on right?
Thanks again for the ride. It's been great! :)
The only thing that did spoil it a bit for me was the amount of crying going on. I know most characters were having a bad time but I thought the crying was overdone. It seemed that Kaylee was crying in just about every scene she was in, which kinda made her annoying after a while. I tend to start reading a story only when it has been completed. Reading it all within a couple of days maybe made the issue stand out more for me.
Having said that, the fact I read all 99 parts in the space of a couple of days suggests that I must have been enjoying it! Thanks for your hard work, and for sharing it!
Jason.
Thanks again
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