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Voices And Visions - Ch 7/12 - Like Puzzle Pieces

Saturday, October 28, 2006

Feelings are examined as the crew gets ready for its first job since Miranda - chapters are linked -

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Rating: Pg-13

Pairing: River and Jayne slight mention of M/I; S/K

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Voices and Visions

By

Lattelady

Ch 7/12 – Like Puzzle Pieces

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Jayne was mighty relieved when he heard his hatch thump closed. He sighed and slumped down onto his bed, enjoying the comfortable feel of his girls pressed against his back. What the gorramn hell was he gonna do? More and more lately River was makin’ him feel things he shouldn’t be feelin’ ‘bout a girl like her. She was young, smart, and Core bred, a real blueblood. He was older, with ‘bout as much book-learnin as his ma could pound inta his head, typical Rim-rat. But he’d taken it a mite further than that. He’d done ‘bout anything he could do for a credit in his time. Yup, not the sorta guy ta take up with a gal like her.

He glared at the hook where his old leather jacket was hangin’ and could remember how good it had made him feel to see her tiny green one beside it. “T’ain’t right,” he muttered as he leaned forward to reach for the awl and leather cutter that was sittin’ on his small shelf at the foot of his bed.

He weren’t worried ‘bout Simon’s reaction if he found out ‘bout the way Girlie made him feel nor ‘bout Mal’s. He could deal with those two, if…well…if things were different. What made him want ta puke was the way he knew River would pull back and look all shocked and hurt, if’n she knew ‘bout the ragin’ desire he felt every time he thought ‘bout her.

He’d spent most ‘a last night holdin’ Girlie in the lounge, as she’d slept. He’d done some mighty hard thinkin’ durin’ those hours. It had come to him right ‘bout dawn that no matter how much they teased each other ‘bout bein’ like Mal and Zoë, they weren’t never gonna be like those two. ‘Cause he knew that Mal didn’t shake with need ‘bout the First-Mate, the way

Comments
Saturday, 28 October 2006 13:12
“Damn I’m royally screwed!” he muttered as he rubbed his eyes.

You are at that Jayne, you are at that. In the best way possible, though.

The way you've portrayed all the relationships and continue to do so, is remarkably realistic. Your characterisation of River and Jayne, both when they are together and way from each other, is perfect. Both confused as all get out by their emotions, and unwilling to indulge too much in what they think they cannot have.

I loved that little bit between Inara, Simon and Kaylee, it was brilliantly done.

I await the next installment with something resembling impatience (the sign of a good storyteller).
Saturday, 28 October 2006 13:34
I'm not usually a River/Jayne fan, but I like this. When you get into their heads and show their feelings and motivations it's easy to see how things might get started between them. You show us their struggle.

Great job on all the characterizations and dialogue.
Saturday, 28 October 2006 20:56
Love the story but sometimes the way River speaks doesn't sound like her. And Jayne being jealous of the Captain? Hmm, thought he was smarter than that. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 31 October 2006 03:58
It's kinda hilarious to think on this...but River and Jayne are picking up a mutated Mal/Inara vibe right now. I say "mutated" cuz while they are still capable of bickering and pissing one another off...they are definitely moving towards a more emotional-restrained relationship right now as they are - like Mal and Inara - struggling with the past's effect on the present and how the future seems so risky but bright:D

And I would totally believe Jayne acting jealous cuz River was getting touchy-feely (but a platonic touchy-feely) with Mal...much as he might not wanna admit it, he wants to be River's Big Bad Shadow;)

BEB

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