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Interregnum

Monday, October 9, 2006

Following Power and Passion ... how far can Mal go? Feedback is very much appreciated!

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3846    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Mal watched as his crew efficiently dealt with all the people, herding them into one of the carriages. Jayne stood guard, ready to shoot if necessary, but that was highly unlikely. The passengers were scared, far too frightened to make any trouble with this big man.

“All secure,” Zoe said, rejoining Mal at the door into the last compartment, where their haul currently sat.

“Shiny,” he said, a grim smile on his face. He knocked with the butt of his gun on the door. “We’re coming in,” he called. “Best be standing in the middle of the room with your hands up, you don’t want to get shot.” He nodded to Zoe.

His first mate set the small charge on the lock, and they stood back. Ten seconds later there was a pop and the door swung inwards. Immediately a shot whined over their heads.

“Now, that was just what I said not to do,” Mal said tetchily.

Zoe tossed a smoke grenade into the carriage and pretty soon the compartment was filled with a grey fog that stung the eyes and choked the throat.

“Now, you gonna come out quiet, or do we have to come in there and kill you?” Mal asked, leaning back against the wall.

“I’m … I'm coming out!” came a voiced, wracked with coughing.

“Fine. Just make it with your hands up.”

An older man staggered to the door, surrounded by billowing smoke, tears rolling down his cheeks, a pistol in his hand. Mal raised his gun, his finger very close to the trigger.

“Sir,” Zoe said quietly, stepping forward and taking the man’s weapon from nerveless fingers.

Mal nodded and lowered his hand. “Best be getting the booty, then,” he said, pulling the kerchief he had tied around his neck into place. He headed into the compartment, coming out a few moments later with a box under his arm. “Call the ship,” he ordered.

His first mate nodded, watching her captain closely.

---

“He wouldn’t’a done it this way before, Jayne,” Kaylee said, stirring the soup dispiritedly. “He’d’a had some plan, got onto the train without having to scare all those folks.”

“Damn

Comments
Monday, 09 October 2006 11:12
Nice is Freya gone now?
Monday, 09 October 2006 13:59
Okay, I'm glad Mal saw his way through ... but BRING FREYA BACK!

Please???? I really liked her!

I also really liked your interplay between Simon and Kaylee, I think you write them well.
Monday, 09 October 2006 20:33
I am so curious about what the good gorram Freya has been keeping from Mal and why things should be better if he just holds on a while longer. I'm hoping it means that whatever she had to do she has done and that she will be coming back to him. It was a bonus having that ghostly visit knock some sense into his grief clouded heart, and I liked that he apologised and asked the crew to stay. I have a feeling that the job Badger may have for him will be a real nasty sting in the tail so hope if it is they shove it where the sun don't shine. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 12 October 2006 02:53
Oh...I do have to wonder how much focus Freya just put behind that spectral visitation trick she just pulled. Cuz if she was fearing for her sanity and self-control, that would probably strain it severely:(

Still...I am damn glad Mal's generally back in the saddle again when it comes to being bearable;)

BEB

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