Blue Sun Room FICTION - HORROR

death in serenity

Friday, October 6, 2006

This is my first story that took place in serenity. I hope you enjoy it and I would love some feed back as always. Also remeber that my spelling isn't the best.

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DEATH IN SERENITY

prologue

This is the recreation of a interview with the suspected murderer River Tam. She was never charged with the murder of Jayne Cobb but we have proof that she was involved. I interviewed her recently and this is what she said.

Interviewer: Did you kill Jayne Cobb?

River Tam: Yes

Interviewer: Why?

River Tam: I think it was his voice, it was fool of males and contempt, not only that but the voices in fact HIS voice tolled me that he was going to kill the crew.

Interviewer: What voices?

River Tam: The thoughts that I pickup when I'm sleeping, they talk to me whisper secrets in my ears. He said he was going to kill them because they had taken a substantial amount of money away from him.

You probably think I'm insane. Let me tell you what I did. I would wait until everyone had gone to bed, then, I would go to the kitchen and take a large knife out, making sher to remember which drawer I tuck it from so that no suspicion would be aroused, the I would creep so quietly, so very quietly and lock all the doors but his, so that no one could find me in the acted. I would then clime head first into his room so that I could see him. I would always take a lantern with me and shine it just over his head to make sure that he would wake up. I would watch him sleeping breathing in and out, in and out, but I couldn't kill him, it wasn't his face that angered me it was his mind and while he was sleeping no thought when through his miserable mind, wile he slept no words past his veil mouth, and so, I found myself unable to do the dead.

This when on for a month I never talked to him during the day as I normally didn't so that their was no change between use, and so you see, he would have to be a very smart person to figure out that every night for several hours at a time, I watched him sleep plotting his death. On the last night of October, I was less careful then the other nights. He had drunk allot that morning and he must have been sleeping well. As I crawled down the stairs my

Comments
Friday, 06 October 2006 21:57
Gutsy idea!!!! However, it could be better excuted, more build up and character study. Also, "their" is a processive meaning belong to them. It is not the word "there".
Friday, 06 October 2006 22:00
I meant "belonging to them". See what happens when I hurry.
Friday, 06 October 2006 22:09
thanks hope, I can't spell well and I used spell check so yah I figured that thier would be some mistakes. Even in this I bet there are some.
Monday, 09 October 2006 06:28
Huh...mighty interesting tale, if a bit damaged by the rough spelling, grammar and punctuation:(

BEB
Thursday, 12 October 2006 02:26
yah i posed alot of horro
FANO1
Monday, 23 October 2006 00:01
It's not horror so much as complete shite. Learn to spell and learn better than 3rd grade grammar so people won't realize what a complete fycktard you are.

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