Chapter 2: Build a Bridge
Disclaimer: Repeat after me, kids: I will tithe my earnings to Joss Whedon…
Disclaimer 2: This story takes place in some places in flashbacks, but the “present” tense is 6 months post-BDM, and there are SPOILERS for the movie plot. But if you’re reading this, why haven’t you seen the BDM yet? Go watch it! Thanks to the people who were kind enough to R&R, and this is an open call to anybody who might be able to serve as a beta for my work- I would heavily appreciate it! everything in italics constitutes either a personal thought or a flashback, and it’s pretty easy to tell which is which. As always- Keep Flying!
She said “You ain’t ugly, you can kiss me if you like”
Go ahead and kiss her, you don’t know what you’re missing
You said, “Baby, you’re special,
But there’s something not quite right.”
She’s a Venus in flares and you wanna split hairs!
“I am innocent, you are a rocket.
Things were ok till you took out the copper”
Leave me alone, and get used to the chains
You’re a pain, a pain, a pain, a pain”
- Belle and Sebastian, The White Collar Boy
River gazed out the window on the bridge. Out in the black, it was quiet. She turned one of Wash’s dinosaurs over in her hands, looking at the many stars. She could name them if she wanted to.
“I think we will thrive here,” she cooed to the dinosaur. Her mind went past the stars. For once it was even her own thoughts that she was lost in. Without the burden of what was hidden on Miranda flitting about in her head she had become more stable. She still spoke in riddles sometimes and felt the emotions and foremost thoughts of everybody she came into the vicinity of. Before she had to carry what she knew all alone, and it was all muddled and buried. Now it was spread out throughout the system, throughout the ‘verse. And she could sleep. And she could grow. She could look at the stars and lose herself. Like she started to a few months ago, on this very bridge.
River had been sitting in the chair, for the first time
Keep writing, I'll be watching for more.
I really like how you're building their relationship, showing it from both River and Jayne's points of views ... of course, Simon's moment was absolutely perfect, although I don't know if he'd cry that easily - I think he'd just be really pissed ...
I can't wait to see where you build this from here!
I had such a hard time writing this chapter and finding good reactions and speech patterns that fell believably enough in-character to actually work.
Can't wait for more :D
Definitely loved the Simon/River moment, even though I too sorta had qualms with Simon getting teary...but I think this could be a "Simon just loses it" moment when he realizes River's point. Even more so, I loved your Rayne moment in Jayne's bunk, as the slow steps towards the kiss build the tension and transformationas nicely;D
BEB
Excellent last line.
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