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A Chance for the Black

Thursday, July 20, 2006

Ever wonder how an excited young mechanic talked her folks into letting her go off on her own?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4573    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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"Don't leave without me!"

Kaylee Frye raced through the ship, bounced down the loading ramp, and took off across the repair yard. Her heart was already racing just from excitement, so she had to pull up short to catch her breath before she was even halfway to where the old Wren Class transport was grounded. Just as well, anyhow. She had to do some quick thinking.

She couldn't believe her luck. Ship's mechanic! And on a good, solid 03 Firefly, too. That would make things easier. With Daddy, anyhow. But Mama, though...

She found herself breaking into a trot, having to hold herself back, breathe regular. That captain, now. He seemed real nice, and he'd offered her the job right quick when she'd figured out the problem with his reg couple. Like that was any kind of trick! She could've done as much when she was ten. Raised to it, you could say, what with Daddy running this little repair station on this dinky little moon since she couldn't remember when. And to think, if she hadn't took up with that cute mechanic, she never would have gone on board, and if the cap -- Mal, that's what Bester'd called him -- if he hadn't come along right at that moment, why, she might have been stuck here till the whole 'verse froze up!

And she might easily have never took up with him at all. That huan mate on the Wren had caught her eye first, and it was only when Bester'd offered to show her his engine room that she'd gone with him. And that had cost him his job, she thought, giggling. At least, it would, if she could only talk her folks into letting her go.

They just had to let her go!

There sure weren't nothin' on this moon to keep her. The boys here were nothin' but dirt poor country hicks, and she knowed 'em all close as brothers. She wasn't going to marry any of them, nohow. About all there was to look forward to was helpin' her Daddy run the yard until he got too old to do it anymore. But out there...

Out there in the black...

Well, out there, who knew what could happen to a girl!

Comments
Friday, 21 July 2006 01:02
aww, that was real sweet! Very nice.
Friday, 21 July 2006 09:45
I loved this, would really have loved to have known exactly what Kaylee's papa said to the Captain while she was off getting her things from home. Very well written and felt like canon. Excellent! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 21 July 2006 17:01
Especially impressive on the dialogue and hence the whole feel of the thing.
Friday, 21 July 2006 21:35
Gotta love Kaylee-joining-the-crew fics!

Smashing job, DonCoat! Would it be too much to ask for a sequel, where Kaylee starts interacting with Zoe and Wash?

BEB
Thursday, 03 August 2006 15:49
My FAVORITE part of the series has a backstory!!

I'm in HEAVEN!

Well-written - you captured them so perfectly. Two thumbs up!
T~
Friday, 04 August 2006 01:51
You know, I'd always wondered what was said between Kaylee and her folks as Mal told Bester "I really don't." Now I know! Thanks for this.
Friday, 04 August 2006 22:43
If you wanted tears, you got'em! Kaylee's on her way!
Tuesday, 08 August 2006 17:57
Lovely.
Friday, 18 August 2006 03:32
oh my goodness. this is the best Kaylee fic. ever.
You have her voice spot on. And for a man I've never 'met' I fell in love with Kaylee's Pa. And Mal! Freshly hurt from Hera, he was so perfect! And the catalyzer (hurt my heart) damn ironies.
I could go on for ages. You wrote one amazing story.

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Sunday, 20 August 2006 17:41
Great story: well written and very true to our BDHs characters.
I particularly loved that her Father was more concerned about checking out the ship to make sure Serenity is space-worthy. For one thing, he probably knew you could tell a lot about a man by the ship he flies!
Wednesday, 01 November 2006 18:32
Gosh, Don - this feels like a missing scene. Very, very good. The voices are spot on.
Yikes. Another author I need to keep track of! (grinning)
Thursday, 14 December 2006 04:15
This is the first piece of the fanfic I've read. It's encouraging to see such good dialgue and characterization.

I agree with Mavourneen. This is like a newly found, deleted scene. Very shiny indeed.
Saturday, 27 January 2007 21:43
Oh my goodness.
I'm sorry I missed this before.

It's great stuff.

I like to read fanfics much like the ones I write- pretty short, and this is a bit longer than I usually read, but that's a problem with me, not your work.

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