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Those Left Behind - Ch 5

Thursday, May 13, 2004

Allies and Confrontations

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A/N: Thanks to everyone for all the shiny comments. This one is longer, I promise. Neroli gets the usual kudos for pointing out the less than perfect scenes.

For Disclaimers, see Ch1.

Chapter 5: Allies and Confrontations

Diyu – hell

Go-se - dog crap

After his talk with Inara, Mal had decided that their plans should move slowly at least until Simon was fully on board. The information that Jayne and Wash had extracted from the doctor gave the crew a starting place to find Simon's previous contacts. Hopefully, they would learn that there was only one facility. Otherwise, they would have to hope that River only felt the pain of victims who were held in the same place she had been a captive. Mal dreaded the possibility that this adventure could be the starting point for another war because he doubted he could recruit enough manpower at this juncture.

Mal turned the pilot's chair when he heard footsteps on the stairs behind him. Simon paused in the doorway to the bridge and leaned heavily on the wall. The boy looked like he had stayed awake for the past week. "Have a seat before you fall down Doc," Mal told him.

Simon blinked wearily as if he had dozed off in the short span of time that he had stopped moving. Slowly he straightened and staggered to the rarely used co-pilot's seat. Mal fought a grin as he realized that their positions mimicked the ones they had taken during their first heart to heart session following the events on Whitefall. "Something on your mind son?" Mal asked as much to get the doctor to talk as to wake him up.

Simon blinked several times to bring his surroundings back in focus. He'd spent the morning and most of the day either reassuring River or desperately trying to find something to block these new nightmares or visions that plagued her so. Now the rest of the ship was once again asleep and Simon found himself unable to join them even though his body was t

Comments
Thursday, 13 May 2004 16:03
Things are moving right along. I'm certain we can trust Jayne. Surely. This time.
Thursday, 13 May 2004 17:09
Shiny! Can't wait to see what the Captain's plan is and how they go about pulling it off. I also like it that Inara gets to help for a change. Good story, *xiexie ni* Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 14 May 2004 01:05
Shiny indeed!! This is a nice sized bite for the reader, gives us a nice piece of the story and has us longing for the next. can't wait for more.

I think I caught a typo for you to edit. see the insertion below:

Mal nodded with only a hint of a smile on his face. "I know that. But I [DON'T]need you drawing attention to yourself and I'd worry if I didn't know someone was with you."

Loving it!!

"well...here I am."
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 14 May 2004 02:23
Jebbypal,

Wow, you rock girl! This story is shaping up nice indeed. Enjoyed Monty's reaction to Inara...asking Mal if he got hitched again. *snickers* On the last two chapters, I enjoyed Wash and Jayne gettin'Simon drunk...too funny. And Wash's recluctance on joining in the mutiny. Peer pressure! *LoL* That's so Wash. I must commend you on how well you write Simon, really hadn't noticed until now, but great job. You capture his worry for River perfectly. And Jayne, love your Jayne. Especially in this chapter--so him. Jumps out of the pages. Bravo!

Cassie E
Saturday, 15 May 2004 23:16
love it.
Monday, 17 May 2004 18:57
Really enjoying the story, and the thoughtful setup/buildup to the action. Good character play. Thanks for sharing!

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