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All Grown Up: Part I

Thursday, April 24, 2003

River wakes to find something wrong. Jayne tries to warn Mal.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3607    RATING: 8.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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My first. I always thought there should be more interaction between Jayne and River, the two isomembers and complete opposites of the ship and quite the characters in themselves. I have some ideas to continue but wanted to see if I was any good at it not being a writer and all.

Disclaimer: All characters of Firefly are the sole property of Joss Whedon and his crew, yo!

All Grown Up: Part 1

She woke with a start, not really sure why but certain that something was wrong. It was quiet and cold. Always cold. She strained her eyes to see in the dark of her room, taking a deep breath, struggling to hear any strange noises. Nothing. Silence. Tossing her covers, she slipped out of bed and put on her sandals. Shivering, she quietly climbed out of her room and turned her head down the hall. Only the sound of her breathing and her heart pounding could be felt. Silly girl, everyone is sleeping. Deep in the stark of space where nothing makes a sound.

It was not always so quiet. Games were played. Ship parts were tweaked. Debates were held. Discussions. Yelling. Fighting. Screaming.

--

“This is not open for discussion”

“Mal, I know this guy. He’s a gorram ruttin’ sonofa whore. He’d sell his mama if the price was right.”

“Jayne, a deal was made. I don’t back down on my word. Now, he happens to screw us, you’ll be right and he’ll find the wrong end of my mad.”

“And we’ll have nothin’.”

“I said you’d be right. That counts for somethin’ in my book. Next time you warn me, perchance I’d think on it more. But only if you’re right.”

“Get ready to be mad, Mal. Get ready to… “ Jayne screamed to Mal’s back. But he was already walking away. Jayne whispered a comment under his breath only heard in saloons and whorehouses as he turned to go to his bunk.

“Gorram fool. Just because he caught me once when the money was too good, he thinks I ain’t got sense. He’ll be sorry, you wait and see.” Talking to no one in particular, he stumbled when the girl was standing in the way

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 24 April 2003 22:03
I hope you will write more. Now I want to know where Simon is. And remember as Billy Crystal said in "Throw Momma From the Train"- 'A writer writes always!'
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 24 April 2003 22:35
Oh! More! Great Jayne, great Mal! Like River, not overwhelming, which she can easily be (just look at me :) )

Keep it coming (where you been, anyhoo?)

~Tzegha
Friday, 25 April 2003 18:14
Yummy! Want more
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 29 April 2003 06:28
What about Jayne's nightmare?
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 01 May 2003 18:00
I really love your writing style- it flows amd moves quickly without blurring any imagry or great lines! Very personal dialogue and good organization. Keep it coming!
Tuesday, 11 October 2005 02:40
Shiny! Great characterizations, especially River--she didn't even need to talk, you just let us inside her head. Felt good to be there, fun to walk with her and sense what she sensed. Nice Jayne. God, I love that man! Fun flashback to him knowing that Mal got him with the money talk. Loved Mal's, "Now, he happens to screw us, you’ll be right and he’ll find the wrong end of my mad.” Cool saying and pure-d Mal: he'll find the wrong end of my mad. Priceless. Only thing wrong with this piece is there ain't more of it. Why not? If I could write like you, I'd plaster the 'Verse, or at least wallpaper the Blue Sun Room wid it. Brang it on, Babe.
-Roving Eye

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