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Leaps of Faith - 22

Thursday, May 4, 2006

Uncertainty is weighing heavily on our pair. Jayne makes sure he's got a job, then makes sure Kaylee knows how he's feelin'.

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Rating: NC17, adult situation

Remarks: A long and rambling tale of the challenges faced by Jayne and Kaylee as they struggle to define their relationship. Some of you are complainin' that things aren't quite so heated as you'd like. While I understand, I've got a story to tell and Jayne and Kaylee don't perform on command. Especially not Jayne. Set after “Objects in Space”. Inara has departed from Serenity and the crew has been through a rough stretch. Click on my name to read the backstory. They’re all backstory.

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Leaps of Faith

Chapter Twenty-Two

Early the next morning, Kaylee and Wash are busy unloading the rented mule and sorting the components and parts they scrounged the day before.

“Let’s pile anything goes to the engine room over here, electronics for the bridge here and odds-n-ends can go in that storage locker ‘til we need em.” Wash grins and rubs his hands together.

“I’ll be so tickled to get this new sensor array installed. It’ll boost our capacity at least 75% and, with as many folks as seem to be out to get us lately, the extra ‘heads up’ can’t be a bad thing.”

Kaylee grabs an open crate and gently stacks bits for Serenity’s engine room in it, heavy stuff first. “How ‘bout that last night, Jayne rescuin’ Simon an’ River? I didn’t even know he’d gone into town. To be honest, I had no idea he was well enough to get out and about like that. Pretty good thing he come along when he did, huh?”

“Simon’s mouth probably wishes he’d showed up ten minutes sooner, but yeah, not exactly what I would have expected, given the history between those two.”

Together, Wash and Kaylee lift a large, heavy part off the cargo bed of the mule and set it to one side. The girl pushes a loose s

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 04 May 2006 23:07
Ahhh! I loved that kiss. Awesome fic, keep on writing!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 05 May 2006 00:10
Me, too, Jayne. Please?
Friday, 05 May 2006 00:11
Fab as usual!
"re… ah… dabilitated " - way too funny!
Friday, 05 May 2006 02:16
Oooooooh I loved this one! This has been my favorite for awhile and for just so many little sublte things. I love Mal's answer to the question of Jayne's employment. I knew that all along and it was nice for Jayne to finally hear it. I loved the kiss, of course.

Also, I'm cool with the slow burn of this story. So often in fic land it goes from I think I like you to sleeping together once to they lived happily ever after. Sometimes in one chpater! Life isn't like that. For that reason and more I like this story line.
Friday, 05 May 2006 03:29
I don't care what anyone else says about your stories, the slow burn is the best way to go. Makes the story last much longer (please don't stop, by the way) giving me little perks each day that you update.

I am very much liking what's going on with Jayne and Kaylee. Having them together without conflict doesn't ring true for me. I agree that Jayne is usually quite sure in what he wants, but Kaylee's confusion is completely in character. I think she's more scared than Jayne of a "relationship" since she seems to approach men in short terms. Having something long-term is, I believe, new territory for her.

The scene with Wash was well done, though I would like to see it expanded. He is a natural choice for her to turn to and is non-judgemental. This could make for good character development.

Of course, a limping Jayne is very sexy in my view of the world...

Waiting as always for more.
Friday, 05 May 2006 04:49
Good stuff, I also like the slow approach to their figuring out what they want. And the kiss at the end, very nice!
Friday, 05 May 2006 08:51
Loved it, have been a little impatient, but agree that this slow burn is what is needed. Loved the kiss at the end, can't wait to get Kaylee's point of view on it!

Keep going - love your story-telling.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 05 May 2006 14:36
Have I written how much I love this story..no well I am now


I LOVE THIS STORY
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 05 May 2006 16:21
<< Mal laughs, “You recovered from them noodles yet? Never seen a man done in by Kaylee’s cookin’ before. Made dinner downright dramatical!” >>

Sound's sooo much like Mal.

“Any man who can eat River’s Dreaded Noodles of Fire and live to tell about it is man enough for me." Heeee
Saturday, 06 May 2006 00:58
The kiss, hotter that River's Noodles of fire, yay!

I like Wash's care and advice to Kaylee and Mal and Jayne's conversation. Jayne's dream about Kaylee too was great, the whole chapter is wonderful.

More please?

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