FIREFLY: THE VIRTUAL SEASON

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LOSTANGEL

Friday, January 17, 2003 7:30 PM

OK, I expanded the opening sequence to include a little humor, a little more detail, and fluff to pace out the scene. There was very little altering of the scene that was already written, I just expanded it a bit.

Firefly: The Virtual Seasons

Virtual Season 2
Episode 1 'Objects in Space pt 2' or ‘Objects in Motion’

Serenity is on a planet called Iris. This is not as much frontier as is a Core world, but not too far in that they don’t feel comfortable. Simon is with Zoe, Mal, and Jayne in a saloon buying the data from an information broker, who is very skittish. Simon does the talking, but Zoe does the glaring. Mal, seeing he is not needed walks out of the bar, to walk around some before returning to Serenity. He idly glances in windows, but doesn’t stay too far away from the saloon were everyone is. He sees a bauble in the window in a side alley and has a flash of Inara wearing it:

The scene is all hazy and blurry, like in the cheesy dream sequences
INARA: (gushing in an exaggerated manner that Inara would never do) Mal, you got this for me?

MAL: (acting all bashful, but manly in an exaggerated manner that Mal would never do) Weren’t nothin’ ‘Nara. Just a bauble is all.

INARA: (still disgustingly gushy and breathless) But this is something I’ve alwys wanted! Oh, you are such a wonderful a man! I promise to give up my disgusting job for you Mal!

She throws herself into his arms.

MAL: (still disgustingly macho) I knew ya’d come ‘round,

as he bends to kiss her, she looks up into his eyes and says

INARA: (in a very deep voice) So…we meet again, Malcolm Reynolds.

Mal gets that confused look on his face, and the hazy scene is snapped back into reality as he sees Early’s reflection in the window behind him.

MAL: Huh?

Cut to CREDIT SEQUENCE

JUBAL: (frustrated that Mal hasn’t reacted tries again.)So...we meet again, Malcolm Reynolds. Funny thing, fate. Particularly when fate has so little to do with us meeting like this.

MAL: So, what does our meeting have to do with?

JUBAL: (on the verge of an epiphany) Fate.

MAL: (glanincg at JUBAL's gun and then smiling back up at him) Figures. Mind if I ask you a question 'fore you go and perforate me?

JUBAL: As long as it won't take to long. I have a schedule to keep. I'm a busy man.

MAL: (wry, quick smile) Weren't you floating off into the deep last we spoke?

JUBAL: I was.

MAL: Thought so. How'd that turn out.

JUBAL: Oh, that went well. I hung out until I decided to come back. Now I have to finish what I started, and I will finish. Last time I would not have taken pleasure in this. This time I will.

MAL: How do you finish this?

JUBAL: I'm cleverer than you might think.

MAL: I see. So how does that explain your getting smacked on the head like that?

Jubal looks confused, and turns just as JAYNE hits him hard with a ceramic sculpture from some local shop.

JAYNE: (looking down at JUBAL) Didn't we kill him already?

MAL: Already, yes, but apparently not enough. Let's go.

JAYNE: Can’t we kill him again?

MAL: No. I reckon I saw one too many local sheriffs around here out to make a name for themselves.

JAYNE: Come on Cap’n. Vera ain’t had no fun in weeks.

MAL: Jayne, I said no. Now you go on and find Zoe an’ the rest. Tell ‘em we gotta get out of here. (looks at Jayne) Maybe you can kill someone next time.

Comments?

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Lost Angel

WASH: Psychic, though? That sounds like something out of science fiction.
ZOE: We live in a space ship, dear.
WASH: So?

KETHRYVERIS

Friday, January 17, 2003 8:30 PM

I've been reading your virtual ep with interest and a thought occurred to me. We know that if Simon and Kaylee weren't on this ship together they wouldn't even glance at each other if they passed on the street. We've seen how Simon fits in (or doesn't) with Kaylee's world. There was the scene in the shop in "Safe" where Kaylee admires a dish or something and asks Inara about giving it as a present and Simon comes in and says it ugly. Before they get together I think seeing how she reacts in his world would be interesting. We saw how out of place she was at the party in Shindig until the men started talking to her about engines and ships and Simon wasn't there for her to be worried about impressing him. He's a gentleman enough to know that if he starts something with her he needs to think about what happens if he or he and River ever leave the ship for good. Would he want Kaylee to go with them? Would she want to leave? Was this just a shipboard romance thing? Would she fit in where they are going?

LOSTANGEL

Friday, January 17, 2003 9:10 PM

The problem that Simon faces is that he must adapt to the world that Kaylee lives in. Because of his fugitive status, he will never be able to return to the Core Planets or the "civilized" world because he would be recognized.

Aside from that, seeing Kaylee interact in Simon's world would be interesting. Maybe a scene where they have to rescue someone, and Kaylee masquerades as a Companion in order to help someone(s) escape.

Damn I love you guys for all this! This is getting a bit cumbersome in the idea exchange area though (unless I'm the only one seriously writing episodes) If anyone wants to see a word doc that's written up so far, email me at: bigsister9874@yahoo.com and I'll forward you what I got.

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Lost Angel

WASH: Psychic, though? That sounds like something out of science fiction.
ZOE: We live in a space ship, dear.
WASH: So?

LEGALBEGAL

Saturday, January 18, 2003 12:50 AM

No need to worry you are not the only one seriously writing eps here. I am working on a first episode using some of the same stuff that you are I think that Jubal is a good way to start. I will be postinng something once all the kinks are worked out.

GUAILO

Saturday, January 18, 2003 1:23 AM

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Serenity is on a planet called Iris. This is not as much frontier as is a Core world, but not too far in that they don’t feel comfortable. Simon is with Zoe, Mal, and Jayne in a saloon buying the data from an information broker, who is very skittish. Simon does the talking, but Zoe does the glaring. Mal, seeing he is not needed walks out of the bar, to walk around some before returning to Serenity. He idly glances in windows, but doesn’t stay too far away from the saloon were everyone is. He sees a bauble in the window in a side alley and has a flash of Inara wearing it:

I'll start off by admitting that I haven't read through all your dialogue yet, but I can tell you this: The crew can't buy information from an information brokerfor way too many reasons.

1) He'd have to access the Cortex and that would immediately tip off the Allience.

2) Any money they earn goes towards resupply of the ship and crew.

Now a fix for this might be to have Inara and Simon go on alone to broker for info or find a reliable contact, but I ahve to think Simon and River both are too hot for that sort of thing. Now, this idea could be somethign that builds up over the course of our season...

If we start small, and work up to this whole not-so-bad business contact (instead of Badger) that gets them legitimate jobs, the process of acquiring that person is a story in and of itself. Just establishing that there IS an information brokerage system/person that they can count on that will get them jobs/info is an "episode" without any crucial character development.

Simply the fact that Jayne has betrayed the crew is cause for alarm and is a great basis for a character piece. We don't need to answer all the unanswered questions about Book and River and what companions are in one go. Take it slow, and the story should develop with the character interaction at the forefront; Firefly was rarely plot or "gimmick" driven.

I'm also compiling a full episode packet and, out of that, I'm making a glossary. That way we'll know that Paradiso is on a planet in the Georgia system, and things like that, to add concreteness to the settings.

Also, I feel Firefly is about the finite, the samll, the personal. Huge conspiracies and flashy or grandiose encounters are the realm of Buffy, IMO, and don't suit the hyper-realistic nature of the Firefly-verse. I'm not trying to sound negative, because all the ideas sound great, but I think pulling in the reigns a tad might be of some use.

Do I sound like a jerk? I don't mean to. Does anyone see where I'm coming from?

SENSOU

Saturday, January 18, 2003 4:18 AM

I see where you're coming from, Guailo. Remeber Ozam's Razor: Keep It Simple. It's very unlikely that the crew would get involved in any large conspiracy, or that more than one "story" would be happening at a time.
That said, what would happen if Patience got involved again? Would it be business or bullets?

Sensou
The difference betwwen sports fans and sci-fi fans is that sci-fi fans have never trashed a train, booed Canada, or torn a man apart limb from limb.

LOSTANGEL

Monday, January 20, 2003 2:31 PM

No, you don't sound like a jerk. We are all adults, and opinions should be welcomed. *"It's a small world after all" plays in the background"*

That said, I like the idea of developing the idea of an information broker over time. Also, the points you brought up could be explained:

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1) He'd have to access the Cortex and that would immediately tip off the Allience.

If there are anonomyous (sp?) ways of accessing information on the internet now, there must be ways of accessing the Cortex in the future.

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2) Any money they earn goes towards resupply of the ship and crew.

As the ship's medic, he could be entitled to a cut (much SMALLER of course) of the take from each job. I don't think that the medicine that Simon uses on River to try to help her would be part of the standard medical fare in the ship's infirmary, and they can't be cheap (mental therapy drugs aren't nowadays, so we can just assume they aren't in the future) so Simon has to have some sort of cash flow.

But I like the ideas that you put in. The way the original script was going, it looked like I had a movie on my hands! Any and all input is appreciated, and damn if this isn't the most fun I've had since the show started!

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Lost Angel

WASH: Psychic, though? That sounds like something out of science fiction.
ZOE: We live in a space ship, dear.
WASH: So?

KAYLEEHOLIC

Monday, January 20, 2003 3:44 PM

Likewise thoughts on Simon and how he could buy the data-chip off the information dealer.

So we have the outline of the pilot above. And it seems that lostangel has 'volunteered' to write the first episode of our virtual season so that means the first virtual season of 'firefly' is well and truly underway.

Lostangel ( may we call you angel ? ) perhaps you could post chunks of the episode here so that we can take a look and 'advise' as it progresses.

On a different note, I have been concepting out ideas for a second virtual episode, tentatively entitled 'the teachings of shan yu' which would be the second 'arc' episode of the virtual season and would take a look at what happened to river. but, it would also include kaylee having to go undercover, so to speak, as a companion, when inara has a bout of sickness.

any comments on this idea, other ideas or any more comments on the pilot are always welcome.

LOSTANGEL

Monday, January 20, 2003 4:03 PM

Youse guys (I'm from Jersey by the way) may call me anything you like. Angel is fine, as is LA (my real name is Leigh-Anne). Creativity is appreciated, as long as its something my mother can read about me.

I don't mind posting the chunks, and other authors are appreciated. I don't claim to be a writer, just a compiler who takes liberties with other people's stuff.

Someone mentioned making a website or something to make this easier, if anyone has that kind of know-how, it's a fine-dandy idea.

Keep 'em comin' guys!

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Lost Angel

WASH: Psychic, though? That sounds like something out of science fiction.
ZOE: We live in a space ship, dear.
WASH: So?

GUAILO

Monday, January 20, 2003 5:07 PM

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As the ship's medic, he could be entitled to a cut (much SMALLER of course) of the take from each job. I don't think that the medicine that Simon uses on River to try to help her would be part of the standard medical fare in the ship's infirmary, and they can't be cheap (mental therapy drugs aren't nowadays, so we can just assume they aren't in the future) so Simon has to have some sort of cash flow.

See, here's an idea that I think could be a start to the whole thing. See how this sounds:

Objects in Motion by fireflyfans.net

Simon brings the issue of a "cut of the take" to Mal at the start of the show, they go to some old buddy of, say Wash's (just to be different) who gets them a simple score because Mal insists that if Simon wants a cut, he'll have to pull his weight. Simon is hesitant because to him that means being a physician and not a criminal, but Mal tells him that's the deal, otherwise it's just the food and clothes Simon and River need to keep them on as crew that they'll get. Simon agrees.

Wash's old buddy, Hui (chinese for "gray"), is similar to Wash as we saw him in his early days: burn-out in a flowered shirt with a scraggly beard and hair and general appearance. They grew up "hyping transports" (the future equivalent of boosting cars) and hot rodding them through asteroid fields and early allience blockades for fun. Hui's a ship wiz and an electronics genius and willing to help outlying colonies with restricted electronics for a price.

Here we have a conflict in a semi-trustworth character, who may or may not be reliable, but who is not malicious. Also, there is conflict in that Simon is new to the whole crime scene and that can be further complicated by the fact that Kaylee becomes instant pals with this new character based on thier common intrest. Simon gets jealous, antics ensue.

Somewhere in the middle of the story we come to find out that the crew's movements are being monitored by Niska due to a transponder on the outer hull of Serenity. Wash's buddy Hui works freelance and cuts into Niska's blackmarket dealings which only sweetens the pot: Niska can take out two birds with one stone.

Mal, Wash Kaylee and Simon are working out the deal with Hui to ship communication gear to a colony world called Ambrosia, within Allience territory but unwilling to pay for or deal with Allience monitored transmissions. Simon pipes in claiming that he wants his "cut" to be information or a means to gather information in the form of equipment, not money. Mal and Wash are taken aback because such equipment is expenseive and will reduce the overall take. Simon's naïveté and his boldness (not to mention his deviousness at formulating this plan) makes Mal prett mad, but there's no turning back now. They have a potential new connection for crime and that's a thing on which a price can't easily be placed. Mal begrudgingly agrees.

As the ship begins to arrange a place to load the goods, Simon and Kaylee have a confrontation where Kaylee has to set Simon straight about his jealousy, but in the end Kaylee realizes how much Simon is really attracted to her. Simon is still fighting the truth but later in the story, this will be taken care of.

During this, the confrontation between a disguised and clearly wounded/tortured Jubal Early and Mal takes place. Jubal ambushes Mal in an alley and the odd terms of Jubal's being alive are cursorally discussed. Jubal is notforthcoming about why he's there, except that he asks Mal if they still have River with them, jsut before Wash smacks Jubal on the head, knocking him unconcious.

Mal and Wash hurry back to the ship. If Jubal is around, he may have attacked the crew as well, and they may have been double crossed by Hui. Wash insists that's not possible, but Mal likewise insists that when doing crime, anything is possible.

They hurry aboard and call back the rest of the crew. Jayne is out carousing and Inara has taken a client whhile Zoe has stood guard at Serenity. Mal needs everyone back at the ship ASAP so they can leave the pl

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