My Serenity 2

POSTED BY: DOUGVAN4935
UPDATED: Wednesday, October 21, 2015 19:03
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DOUGVAN4935

Sunday, October 18, 2015 6:15 AM

Hi,

I was thinking about alternates to a sequel to the continuation of the story line after the Movie killed off Book and Wash.

I have written a history book on the Gainesville Midland railroad (about 400 pages). I researched another but there was not enough new to support a new book.

I have also written several "For Dummies" type books on Civil Engineering. And numerous articles for magazines and trade publications. All technical.

Thinking on Serenity and where it might go, I had the muse to write a fictional story. I'm not good at fiction or describing in detail the surroundings.

I offer my beginnings for your enjoyment and help to improve the the feel of the not to expected to be published story. Enjoy and offer suggestions if you wish. Since it is mine and for me primarily, I'll accept or reject them as I want - no hard feelings. Help with Manderin and being in character is appreciated.

Contact me privately at edgarcorny gmail com if you wish.

Doug vV

Last updated 20151021.
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My Serenity 2

Prelude

“In the year 2525, if man is still alive; If woman can survive, they may find ...”

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The detective at the crime scene just shook his head. Drive Who Orange had never seen a crime scene like this one before.
His partner, J Ti Won, asked “Who could do such a thing?”
Orange looked around the crime scene. About 20 bodies of Alliance troopers in various stages of dismemberment laid about. “J, do you recall the Reaver mess about 15 years ago?”
“Not really.”
“I did not think you'd recall that goram incident. Book died in that mess.”
“Book? Your retired A-team partner that got religion?”
“I was never certain if he was under cover or retired, but yes, him. He and I were brothers in arms. I never heard what the Reaver incident was all about.” Drive said. “I always wondered if he might have been following someone instead of a walkabout.”
“You did not have close contact with him?”
“He, as I, was often on deep black missions.”
A junior detective came hurrying up. “Detective Orange. The results say that there was only one intruder.”
J was startled into a comment “One? That can't be right.”
Orange looked at a mark he dismissed before. It looked like nested pentagons – a ten pointed star. A mobius strip was entagled in the middle of the image with the letters a-k-s-i-n-a randomly placed around the mobius surface.
J started saying “That can't be t-” when Drive Orange interupted with “Don't say or think any more about this 'till I tell you otherwise. Either of you.
“Junior detective, seal off this crime scene. Code word XYZZY.”
The junior detective's eyes buldged but then said “Yes sir.”
“J as of this moment only you and I are authorized access. Take the junior detective and use op-sec AZA-19. I have things I need to do and we'll meet up later.”
“You got it.”

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Drive got out his hover at a shopping area on Areal. He goes inside and looks at a window display. There is a small knob that he covertly pushes and then enters a code and gets a DNA scan. He walks into a wall that has become a passable holographic image.
He walks down the blueish corridor through a body scanner and enters an office. It is a semi plush office that is more utilitarian than anything else. There are two wall screens with images on them. Off to one side is a small meeting nook with a sofa and some chairs and a high coffee table. There is a standard desk with a holo screen and keyboard, along with two other desk like items that might or might not be real desks.
D R Who stops and waits while the female behind one of the maybe desks aknowledges him.
“Hi Orange, you were not to report in for another two weeks.” she states.
“Taunta Anna, something's come up and it can not wait. I have a XYZZY.”
“Op-sec?”
“AZA-19. I was on a routine call to the Alliance storage facility at Jcityton. There were about 20-odd Aliance soldiers dead and a police test showed only one intruder. They were not killed but taken down like with a scyth

THGRRI

Sunday, October 18, 2015 8:34 AM

Yeah Ok, too tired to read it this evening but yea! I love when people do this. Thanks for the story.

DOUGVAN4935

Wednesday, October 21, 2015 12:04 AM

Hi,

You are welcome. I love sharing. I am finding fiction an interesting writing experience.

I finally found some summaries on the Firefly Comic books.

I found that I'd gone in a different direction than Joss Wedon had gone.

I have not been connected to the science fiction/science fact comminity as closely as I am the railfan/model railroad community.

This post was the original 6000-odd words. I was trying to learn how to write fiction, put the changes in my head for my story line, and I just found multiple misspellings (Darned Open Office had lost the link to its dictionary and I did not realize it).

My "Prelude" is the changes that happened between Serenity the movie and my first story. I am into my first story "Recon" and I feel I'm getting better with writing.

With me going a different way from the Joss Wedon's direction, I did not know if you are interested in my story as I develop my writing skills. Prelude (finished) and Recon (unfinished) now total almost 14000 words.

I am having fun with it and I'd like to share if you do not mind something that is not following Wedon's direction.

Doug vV

THGRRI

Wednesday, October 21, 2015 12:19 AM

Joss is not a god. I prefer a future with all original cast members.

DOUGVAN4935

Wednesday, October 21, 2015 7:03 PM

Hi,
20151021

I just updated the cleaner version of the Prelude on my first post in this thread.

The first chapter(?) is called Recon.

When I have it figured out, I'll upload it.

As for the "Joss is not a god comment", I've been on boards (or chat rooms or forums) where the slightest deviation from the canon is met with very sharp or nasty language. I stay away from them - I do not feel comfortable with that type.

Others are very free wheeling. I prefer something in the middle. I just wanted to be sure about the board "flavor" if you will.

Thanks.

Doug vV