Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Red Herring

Sunday, April 2, 2006

This "episode" takes place right where the series left off. Inara is about to leave, and nobody is dead (yipee!). It was written to showcase Inara and her relationships on Serenity. It's Inara-centric, I wrote this for a class project revolving around controversy/sex-work.

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Red Herring

By Kristin Matte

Scene I

The air-lock door was still descending as Mal walked out to its ledge. He took in long

breaths of fresh air as he surveyed the land. Lush meadows, green trees, brown earth and

blue skies, it had been near a decade since he'd last been on Pernox. As he stood in

silence watching the sunrise, he could hear the steady, focused stride of Zoë 's boots.

“Wash wants to know when to set our departure time for, sir.” She stated.

“Well, tell him ideally, sunset.”

“Ideally?”

“Ideally.”

“So then most-like tomorrow?” She quipped.

“Most like,” Mal responded, eyes fixated on the land.

Zoë was off as quickly as she had come, and her methodically paced prowl was replaced

with the soft-steps of Kaylee. She was almost skipping, and Mal could hear her humming

and singing. He didn't have to turn around, nobody in the `verse could be that chipper this

early in the morning, he thought. She perkily stepped up next to him, and looked out onto

the vast plains that surrounded them. Her hands were on her hips as she slowly twisted

her torso right-to-left and left-to-right, as if listening to a song nobody else could hear.

“Sure looks like it's gonna be a beautiful day. Shame be'n cooped up in that engine room,” Kaylee flirted, innocently.

“No it ain't,” Mal said matter-of-factly. “You love that engine room. Who am I to deprive

you of all that wrenchin’ and hammerin’?” Mal looked forward, never making eye contact with Kaylee as he spoke. “That's important technical stuff that needs do'n if we plan on getting to Red Herring on time.”

“I know Cap'n,” she paused, “but how often do we get sunny days like this in the middle of the black?”

“Well if we lived in the sun Kaylee, we'd be dead.”

“Cap’n....” Kaylee whined.

“Fine,” he huffed, it didn't seem like he had much of a choice, having her pouting in the

engine room would only slow her down anyway, “You can take a two hour leave, but not a minute more Kaylee, and I mean it.”

“Thanks Cap

Comments
XKRISTINX
Sunday, 02 April 2006 03:56
I forgot, maybe I should include one os these thingees:

Title: Red Herring
Author: xKristinx
Email: kristinmatte@yahoo.com
Permission to archive: Sure, please credit me though.
Fandom(s): Firefly
Genre: General Fiction
Rating: PG
Summary: Picks up where the series was cut-off. . .
Warnings: A pretty long read, but I think it's pretty good. (I like myself).
Notes: I wrote this as a creative piece for a my Controversies in Feminism class, I also have a theoretical component if you're interested.
Acknowledgments: Joss owns my ass.
Sunday, 02 April 2006 08:14
The writing (and spelling, oh, the spelling!) still have a few flaws, but the story and very especially the points you make about Mal and Inara and the concept of freedom are great! Dead on and beautifully tragic because of it.

Keep up writing, you can only get better. :)
Sunday, 02 April 2006 08:49
Good story overall. I also liked the part where Mal and Inara talk about freedom. I also really enjoyed the exchange between Inara and Jayne. They don't get enough time together, do they? Keep writing.
Sunday, 02 April 2006 09:23
A good little fic you have here, Kristin. Initially found it on the Canadian Browncoats mailing list. Am sending an edited copy to help ya out if you repost somewhere else.

Have to back AgentRouka here...spelling is kinda knarly. I know I am willing to lend a hand (as other Browncoats) in beta reading any future fics. And a couple of things jumped out at me that could possibly stand to be altered (I made footnotes in the edited document!)

Still...a good first effort! Can't wait for the next one;)

BEB
XKRISTINX
Sunday, 02 April 2006 18:16
I really appreciate the comments, this is my first attempt at writing fiction since High School. . . So it's been a while.

I look forward to any comments or critiques.

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