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Lost Souls - part 1

Thursday, March 23, 2006

Post BDM. Our BDHs find something unexpected in the reckage of a ship.

This is my first fanfic so feedback is welcome. As the title says, this is only part one of a larger story so I really want to know if it's worth posting the rest of it.

Big thanks to everyone who betaed for me. BlueEyedBrigadier, sileespacemonkey, and espescially 2x2. You guys are life savers.

Oh yeah, Serenity and her crew are all Joss's blah blah blah. Captain Conners and her crew are mine. If you like them, let me know.

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Lost Souls: part one

by Kayna

“Mal, could you come to the bridge, please?”

“Gah! What?” Mal said as River’s voice over the com woke him out of a sound sleep. That was all right, though; he’d been having bad dreams – about the war he thought, or maybe not. Wash and Book had been there; so had a lot of other dead people. It was all mixed up. Didn’t really matter though, he was awake now and the nightmare was fading.

“I said, ‘could you come to the bridge?’. We need to show you something.”

“Uh, yeah. Sure. Be right there.”

He headed to the bridge, thinking about the people waiting for him there. River had sounded all right on the com and she did seem to be doing better since Miranda. He hoped it would last but he couldn’t be sure which was why Zoe would be there with her. Zoe. She seemed fine on the surface but she didn’t smile anymore. He understood that in a way, Wash had been everything to her and Mal knew what it was like to lose everything. His wounds had finally started to heal, though. There would always be scars but even the new ones were closing. He hoped Zoe’s would too. He was pulled from his reverie as he entered the bridge and looked up.

“Tzao gao.”

Floating outside, just beyond the cockpit were the remains of what had one been a ship. He couldn’t be sure what kind it had been, maybe a transport, not much bigger than Serenity, he thought. One thing he did know was that something bad had happened here. Part of him didn’t want to look at the debris – he was pretty sure there’d be people in there – but he did anyway. There might be something still intact in all that mess that could be of use.

“What the hell is this?” he asked.

“This, Captain, is Polaris. Transport ship, Aurora class. Mackenzie Conners, Captain.”

“Now how do you know all that?”

“A message, transmitting from just the other side of all this mess. That’s the first thing it said. Thought we’d wait for you to play the rest.”

“There’s someone out there. Alive, but just barely.”

Before

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 23 March 2006 23:21
seems like a good opening scene. I'd read more.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 23 March 2006 23:22
one thing I didn't like was the captains name. Already have a Mac Calhoun in Star Trek New Frontier.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 March 2006 00:43
Never heard of Mac Calhoun or Star Trek New Frontier.
Anyway, there's so much writing out there that any new names are bound to resemble a name someone else used somewhere.
Friday, 24 March 2006 00:44
Gah! It said I was logged on! Whay did it cll me anonymous?
Anyway, that last one was mine.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 March 2006 02:23
I'm definately interested so far! Wanna know what happened! Kim
2X2
Friday, 24 March 2006 02:48
Even though I've read it several times already, it's still intriguing!
Glad to see it posted! Good job!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 March 2006 05:40
Even though I betaed it, I still loved seeing it here, Kayna!

Hope the next bit starts getting into the issue with River and Mackenzie quickly...I am quite intrigued;)

BEB
Friday, 24 March 2006 05:41
Last bit was me....FFF.net didn't like me temporarily. Guess I did a Simon huh?

BEB
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 March 2006 08:04
Nice start! Very strange and spooky

till next time...
Friday, 24 March 2006 09:54
Great start to the story. I want to find out what happened to Captain Connors crew.
Wednesday, 31 May 2006 11:14
DEFINITELY worth posting the rest, if only to satisfy my growing addiction to your work.

b

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