Best Served Cold - Chapter 1
Tuesday, March 7, 2006
Only one little word fits that adage, as we open, a certain bounty hunter's fate is revealed, River's forsight continues to torture her, and the crew recovers from a rough night with said Bounty Hunter.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 2810 RATING: 9.0 (PG) SERIES: FIREFLY
Best Served Cold
A Big Damn Fanfic
By Curtis Mitchell
Endlessinstant@gmail.com
EDIT 3/8/06: Revised two small sections (just changed the wording a bit, the length is still the same) to take into consideration the feedback I received below. Thank you so much! Course, now you guys will look like dummies to whoever might read this >.>
Quick notes
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Post Objects in Space – Pre Those Left Behind
This is my first Firefly fanfic. I make no claims about my writing but I do ask that if you take the time to read my little offering that you give me some feedback. It is something that I would like to continue doing in the future and I would like to get down the personalities of our Big Damn Heroes as best I can. So if you think Jayne says something distinctly Unjayneish you go ahead and tell me I’m a moron. Oh, and thanks for reading :)
I have posted this on Fanfiction.net, I mention this for no other reason then to say that it is best structurally organized there. My primary focus is Fireflyfans.net, my forum of choice, and the latest chapters will probably be found there, but Fanfiction.net offers the convenience of all the Chapters being filed together, which might make things easier for the reader coming across this for the first time.
Chapter I: A Bug and a Bounty Hunter
Only a single layer of protective cloth separated bounty hunter Jubal Early from the cold blackness of Outer Space. As the bounty hunter spun in an uncontrolled counter-clockwise spin breathing in the last ten minutes of his oxygen, he tipped his head slightly and repeated the mantra he’d been going over for the last thirty minutes, “Yep, here I am.”
He’d made a deadly mistake in underestimating his prey. He prided himself on knowing his target well enough that such things couldn’t happen to him. But River Tam was something else. She was something real special. He’d gathered from what he’d heard that she wasn’t exactly there and he’d picked up something about her being some sort of science pr
I like your characterisations as well, super-shiny.
I hope you keep going with this, I know how hard it is to write your first fic and test the waters, but this is shaping up to be a great piece of fanfic.
:D
I really enjoyed it and am looking forward to what might happen next.
My only criticism only shows what a science geek I am:
"Exerting the slightest bit of force, he sent his body in a spin in the other direction."
What can he exert force on in space? nothing! Have him fire a jet in his suit or something.
I know, nit-picky! The characters are more important than the science, and those you got going good. :)
I like your description of River and her psychosis. As a fellow fan-fic-er I know it's tough to figure out how to convey her tragic state of mind while also not making her a weak, giant puddle. It is a delicate balance.
I hope you continue with this, it's got definite potential and a good bit of intrigue!
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