Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Pride Goeth Before You Fall - Part 1 (of 6)

Monday, February 13, 2006

Post-BDM. It's easy to know when things aren't right, but a good deal more difficult to swallow your pride and fix them. Mal/Kaylee.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2079    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Simon’s hands were large, strong and incredibly soft. Those hands lifted Kaylee’s shirt over her head and traveled in a firm touch down her back to settle comfortably at her waist. The heat created where the doctor’s palms met her skin made the rest of her burn. The engine room, whirring and humming around them as the ship hit atmo, made the temperature in the room rise a few more degrees as the engine worked extra hard to get Serenity flying faster. He moved his hands to the back of her bra and Kaylee briefly fantasized about what those – precise, healing, talented hands – could do to her. She brought her own rough, grease-stained hands up to grip Simon's strong shoulders, his shirt long since lost to the far side of the engine room. They both begin to sweat with the heat and the effort of their foreplay.

Their coupling was intense and fiery – the result of months of built-up sexual frustration and longing finally set free. Their kisses were long, exploratory and full of want. Simon held her body as close to his as possible and she savored his possessive grip on her body. Kaylee battled her conflicting desire to continue their lovemaking forever and her need to have him fill her right the hell now. If anyone chanced upon them during their tryst, they didn’t notice. Their sense of touch heightened so much as to drown out all of their other senses.

Now, Kaylee hadn’t been remotely virginal since she was 14, when she’d let the neighbor’s boy go “exploring” with her in the woods behind her house. But this--the things Simon's hands were doing--made her blush and tremble like was her first time all over again. Except, thank goodness, without the awkward fumbling and quick finish.

For his part, the good doctor certainly wasn’t shy about sex when it came to actually doing it. He delighted in eliciting pleasurable reactions from her body: a shiver, a moan, an inadvertent thrust of her hips. At a certain point – it was probably when Kaylee turned her lips to his ear and whispered “now, Simon. No more waitin’”

Comments
Monday, 13 February 2006 12:35
Wonderful, can't wait to see where you intend to go with this story. But Reavers? Gorramit, think I might have to break into a run my own self. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 13 February 2006 14:21
You got me wondering about the next part! So please post more :)

ANONYMOUS
Friday, 17 February 2006 22:52
i was kind of wondering if anyone has written anything between mal and kaylee. i'm glad someone did.

this is really interesting. i'm very intrigued on where you're going with this. time for the next chapter.
Friday, 17 February 2006 22:54
sorry....i could have sworn i had log in but the anonymous above is me (kidkarmina). just want to say i'm really enjoying your fic.
Monday, 27 February 2006 06:13
you have real talent I mean real talent you should write a book or something
Monday, 27 February 2006 14:49
think mal's got the right idea: RUN!!!

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ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 02 March 2006 07:41
This is a very, very interesting fic. I've read your whole series now and by far it is one of the most realistic about love and relationships, that I've seen.

Especially this part.
"Nothing in their relationship ever compared to that first night they spent together. That fulfillment both were hoping to feel after their coupling never came....

Eventually, though, Kaylee realized that she wasn’t getting any happier being with Simon."

You just may have written about my marriage, for all I know. We were as awkward around each other as Simon and Kaylee. There was longing and curiosity for a long time, but once we actually got together, it fizzled out - it's like the awkwardness just never went away. We even married, and a year after marrying, we separated.

This story was so real it hurt. This is the truth of a lot of real life relationships.

And you show Mal and Kaylee coming together in an honest, adult, low-key fashion - also the truth of a lot of *good* real life relationships.

Bravo. This is about one of the best, most emotionally real fanfics I've read - true about love, not merely fantasy/wish-fulfillment which most romantic type of fanfics seem to be.

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