Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Under Your Skin

Monday, February 6, 2006

This was originally not intended as a fan fiction story and still does not have any neccessary connection to the Firefly 'verse. It is just a little scene that could take place almost anywhere. But while writing it, it more and more seemed to fit to a decadent central planet surrounding where a rich guy might just be looking for kicks and a Blue Sun Corp. representative is selling him just what he is looking for.

I wrote this story in German and then translated it to English, so there might be some mistakes in there. I am thankful if you point them out for me, but be gentle with me ;)

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2821    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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„Please, come in! It will be a pleasure to show our products to you. Do you already have any experience with the Snapshot Technology at all?”

“No, I never…”

“That’s all right. There always has to be a first time. There is no point in getting nervous; it is not dangerous in any way. Please, lie down on the couch over there. I will explain to you how this works.”

“I am not sure yet whether this is the right thing for me, but a friend talked me into it. She is a very enthusiastic user of your products and she sounded really convinced. She was the one who gave me your card, by the way.”

“Yes, I see. Okay, so we will start out with something nice and easy. Have you ever been fishing?”

“Fishing? You mean, catching fish?”

“Yes, exactly”

“Well, as a little boy, together with my uncle. It was quite nice.”

“In that case you will like this one. It is called Fisherman from our product line ‘wild moments’. It is the exact instant when the fisherman notices the fish taking the bait and sets his hook. Pleasure, excitement and power over nature meshed together. You will feel it.”

“What do I have to do?”

“Nothing! Just lie back and relax. See, this is one of our samples. You just screw the applicator onto the ampoule like this.”

“But the ampoule looks empty to me.”

“In a way it is. Moments are not material. You cannot see them or touch them. But the moment is in there nevertheless.”

“You mean it is invisible, like a gas?”

“No, it is not a gas. Gas is a form of matter. This is pure essence. But if you feel better with it, then think of it as a gas. It is easier for the mind to grasp something concrete, isn’t it?”

“And this applicator? What do you do with it? It looks a bit scary with all those points on it.”

“ Don’t worry about it. It looks worse than it is. It hurts less than an ordinary medical shot. The needles are just there to get the moment under your skin. It can be applied anywhere on the body, but studies have shown that the experience is most intense when the applicator is

Comments
Tuesday, 07 February 2006 00:24
Wow! That was a very truthful bit of fiction...

It was almost like giving them a taste to get them addicted. They manipulate and tease and offer more than you can expect and then the...Kick Off.

So, much of what Blue SUn Corp. seems to stand for.

Obsidiana Girl
Tuesday, 07 February 2006 02:27
Wow! This was creepifyingly realistic! *shivers*

You did a great job translating from German to English! I only saw a couple of things: alright should be two words "all right"; "As you might now" should be "know"; and "always in a save" should be "safe". But, hey, you didn't confuse assure/ensure or advise/advice like lots of native speakers do! Kudos!
Tuesday, 07 February 2006 17:38
Hi, thanks for your comments, I am glad you liked it. I did go back and corrected the errors Lvs2read has pointed out. Thank you for that. I don't know why I always confuse "know" and "now" recently. It happens subconsciously, I know the right spelling, but it is like a little dyslectic spot in my brain... :-) Funny. i think I made that special mistake about five times in the past two or three weeks and did not notice myself until someone pointed me to it. That's weird.
Tuesday, 14 February 2006 12:01
whoa. that's...*loses restraint* can i try???

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