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Flight of the Albatross Part 2

Wednesday, February 1, 2006

See part one...then you'll know... :-)

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3604    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimed in part 1

The night was alive with color and noise and the temperature was high. The air was permeated with the stench of un-bathed bodies and the decay of the refuse lined ally ways. People jostled by on their way to their own mischief and Mal felt the hair rise at the back of his neck.

There was nothing like a smoothly running plan to raise the hair on the back of Mal’s neck. Plans usually had a way of kicking him when he least expected it and for some reason the smoothness with which River’s plan was flowin’ made him all kinds of wary.

Their shuttle had docked a few minutes earlier and Kaylee and Jayne’d headed for the nearest parts dealer in hopes o’ finding a stabilizer that wouldn’t put too big a dint in what coin the ship had left.

Mal was a realist and he knew they couldn’t count on the take from Fanti and Mingo bein’ of use. If all else failed then they had orders to high tail it back to the ship and be ready to fly.

That was an eventuality that Mal really disliked. He wanted his ship in good workin’ order. Leavin’ with her still banged up wasn’t on Mal’s short list of things he wanted to have happen. If things went as smooth with Fanti and Mingo as they’d gone with the port authority coin wouldn’t be a problem.

They were almost to the Maidenhead when Mal felt the characteristic lightness that accompanied his pocket being emptied as a girl of eight brushed past him. She didn’t get far because Mal grabbed her up by the scruff of the neck and gave her a stern look. She just smiled unabashedly and handed his wallet back to him.

Mal shoved it into his pocket and held out his hand. The girl just stared at it and then looked at him questioningly.

“You an me both know the wallet weren’t the only thing you took and if you ain’t lookin’ to get turned over, you’ll be handin’ it over.” Mal told the girl who scrunched up her eyes and stuck out her tongue at him. She wriggled and twisted, but Mal wasn’t letting go. Finally, she dug a small silver object on a ch

Comments
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 01:56
Another excellent one!

I liek it how it continues the story, but like the series they both really have their own stories...


yet again, worht every word
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 06:02
I love how you put your ideas in motion. The characters are completly believeable and the plot is intriging. Keep going!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 06:49
Nice liked your first one better cause it was longer. i like long chapters
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 07:14
Yes, I like longer chapters as well, however this is a work in progress and I have been working on it for a while. The next part should be fairly long, but not like the first part.

I am glad you like the fic and sent SHINY!

Sid
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 07:16
Zmann966 Tuesday, January 31, 2006 - 15:56
Another excellent one!

I liek it how it continues the story, but like the series they both really have their own stories...


yet again, worht every word***

Thanks, I am glad you like it and it is a very nice complement that you think it was worth the time to read it.


SID *FEEDBACK IS SHINY!*

Wednesday, 01 February 2006 07:22
****I love how you put your ideas in motion. The characters are completly believeable and the plot is intriging. Keep going!****


Thanks, I always worry that I might not be getting my ideas across in any viable way. I love Mal, River, Zoe and Serenity and even Jayne(whom we can always count on to say the absolutly wrong, but oh, So, hi-larious thing)...I just tolerat the others because they help move the plot along.

If I quit writing this one my beta would hunt me down and (what was the phrase she used? Oh, yes!) Being attacked by reavers would look like a walk in the gorram park compared to the things she'd do to me. *waves cheerily at Gwen*


Sid
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 15:23
Was the third poster, now that I have more time to post. I like this series a lot, it has a lot of potional I hope you do more. I noticed(not sure which chapter cause I read them back to back) but in one of them River, Mal and Zoe was all shoping together while Simon and Inara watched. Had a little family feel between them, which was a very interasting perceptive. And could defently see Zoe being one of the first to reason thru seeing River do that and just accept her as another warrior woman(soldier). I think that would be a interasting relationship that few fan fics touch on. Zoe sorta taking on a more mentoring role for River like she most likely did for young women in the war. Anyways look foward to more hope we don't have to wait to long.
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 19:55
Brilliant, was all kinds of disappointed this part was so SHORT. You got me quickly addicted to novel length chapters with the first part! Absolutely adoring this story and can't wait for more. Wonderful! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 20:01
****Had a little family feel between them, which was a very interasting perceptive. And could defently see Zoe being one of the first to reason thru seeing River do that and just accept her as another warrior woman(soldier). I think that would be a interasting relationship that few fan fics touch on. Zoe sorta taking on a more mentoring role for River like she most likely did for young women in the war. Anyways look foward to more hope we don't have to wait to long.****

Thanks for posting again...I am always very interested in what about a story touched the reader.

I always thought that the relationship between Mal and Zoe was a very close one and I liked the idea of non-sexual love between them.

I am glad you picked up on the idea that Zoe has a maternal/mentor/warrior in arms relationship growing with River. I think that as live continues on the three will become far more integral to each other...also...there is a rough patch directly ahead and I think Zoe is going to have to do some a$$ kicking...Mal's and River's and then do some mending of bonds.

Yes, this is going to continue until either the muse or I die...or the story finishes...I think I said this is a slow burner fic and I don't even think I am half way yet.

Thanks for the SHINY!

SID
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 20:20
****Brilliant, was all kinds of disappointed this part was so SHORT. You got me quickly addicted to novel length chapters with the first part! Absolutely adoring this story and can't wait for more. Wonderful! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me****


I know I was writing for a while on the first section and the second section is just because it got so long...I was getting complaints about the length on my LJ so I started posting small chunks instead...The next part is going to be longer...the angst starts here and I hate cliffy angst so i won't post until the angst is over and done with...

Sid
Thursday, 02 February 2006 15:01
You are officially my Mal/River Goddess, lol, and while I don't share your eye bleeding problem over most other ships, lol. I do share your unease over any Mal/Inara loving. I hope more than anything that you'll continue this story because there aren't that many out there and I need my Mal/River fix.

~*Hannah*~
Thursday, 02 February 2006 19:50
Oh, I'm continuing all right. I am working the chapters so they are longer...I like long chapters and it is so darned hard to find really long Mal/River fics.

Was up until three again this morning getting some plot twists set up...the next part should post around Sunday...or Monday...My beta is going on vacay...

I'm the godess...hmmm....I like that! Thanks! I always love a bit-o'-SHINY.


Sid
Saturday, 11 February 2006 23:27
goddess!!!! *grovels at obsidianagirl's feet*

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ANONYMOUS
Monday, 27 March 2006 17:23
Excellent! I loved this story.

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