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Aint No Soldier

Thursday, January 12, 2006

The Independants are regrouping and Mal makes the decision to leave Serenity. Jayne tags along.

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He shifted the bag from one shoulder to the other, wishing he hadn't decided to cram the capture of Inara into the pocket on the side. The slim piece of plastic weighed heavier on his shoulders than the five firearms he was lugging around with it.

In the distance, he could faintly see the glow of light from the Mudder's town, and veered away from it. Didn't seem to matter how far he walked though, the smell of Canton followed him. He remembered telling Simon, way back before he'd learned that the best family was the one you chose, that this moon was a good drop point for precisely that reason.

Never imagined he'd be coming back at Monty's request. He'd been hearing the whispers of rebellion for months, felt the excitement of strikes against the Alliance second and third and fourth hand. The stirrings of belief bubbling in his stomach until he couldn't ignore it anymore.

Weren't no better place for a clandestine meeting to organize the rebellion than the stinkpot of the 'Verse.

He quickened his step.

Had to get to the meet spot. Sooner the better. Less temptation to look back and see Serenity silhouetted behind him. Quiet and still. Empty of his hopes and dreams, but full of the people who carried them.

Every step he took, he willed the ship to take off. Wants Wash to take Zoë and Jayne and Kaylee and Simon and River and Book and Inara, maybe Inara most of all, off this world and far, far away. They don't understand, but he didn't really expect them too.

Except for Zoë. She should have understood. She should be by his side, solid and silent and disapproving, but with him none-the-less.

At some point, when he wasn't looking, the Zoë he knew slipped away, into Wash's arms. And Mal loved her just a little more for finding something else to live for. She didn't understand him leaving. For her, their life aboard Serenity was more important than all else. As long as they kept flying, the rest of the 'Verse could self-implode so far as she was concerned.

She expected him to feel the same.

Comments
Thursday, 12 January 2006 09:23
Rinny, this was so wonderful! I love the interplay between the two, you have their voices so perfect...
I positively drool over a protective Jayne...I'll have to admit, I was hoping he'd be the one losing clothing, but this was hi-larious.

you are amazing:)
Thursday, 12 January 2006 12:45
A different take indeed. I love it. The interaction between our two is great. Love how Jayne outwitted 45 of the troop.

“Ain’t gonna fight in no war"

Wonder what he did do *wanders off in a daze.*
Thursday, 12 January 2006 15:02
Absolutly the best readin Ive done inna while.

I'll keep an eye out for more of your works. From here on.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 12 January 2006 17:07
"Jayne was still smiling, the firelight playing across the angles of his face, when the first stragglers started filtering into camp just over an hour later. Mal sat beside him, an open can of beans in hand as Claeys came to stop in front of the fire, a malevolent glare fixed solidly on Jayne’s still smirking face."

I like that, how you set a scene. Good stuff overall.
Thursday, 12 January 2006 17:49
Oh, this is so entertaining I am just lapping it up. absolutely *love* the notion of Jayne being Mal's bodyguard. It was unexpected but heartwarming at the same time and I can't wait to see what happens next. The dialogue and understanding between our two fine heroes is precious. So, Mal's platoon are going to be Special Ops? Let's hope Claeys gets a pair of pants to wear by then, unless the aim is to *moon* the enemy troops. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 12 January 2006 21:03
<bows down in tribute>

Oh my god! That is so funny.

Alec Baldwin's first acting job was in the movie "My Bodyguard", early 80's I think and he played the bodyguard.

Excellent job with the voices, and especially awesome job with Jayne the evil tracker man putting the recruits in their place. I loved it!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 12 January 2006 22:53
I hope there's more of this coming soon. I like the interaction between the two, and the letter from home was a nice touch.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 12 January 2006 23:02
great job in capturing the essence of the relationship between the two characters. the last scene was too funny. wonder how jayne managed that?
Thursday, 12 January 2006 23:42
I love, love, love it!!! Please write more. Also it is Adam not Alec, could you imagine Alec Baldwin as our beloved Jayne!! EWWWWWW!!!!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 13 January 2006 00:13
I'm really enjoying this. I do hope that you will continue this story. Your dialog, narrative description, and not to mention, grammar - all excellent.
Friday, 13 January 2006 00:27
Love, Love, Love this!
Woo Hoo
Write more!
Friday, 13 January 2006 02:40
I've heard stories of Army Rangers, Marine Recon and Navey SEALs doing similarly embarassing things to recruits during training.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 13 January 2006 20:11
Please, please continue this story! This is way entertaining, and I'd love to see what else Jayne can do to help whip these kids in to shape.
Sunday, 15 January 2006 17:20
“So, let me see if I’m understanding this. Forty-five of you were out there in the woods together. Jayne here managed to strip ya of precious articles of clothing, get you all muddy and not one of you managed to catch sight of the back of his shirt the entire time?”
yup, that's our man!!!

b
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 20 January 2006 02:25
if there is not more, the people will riot in the streets

ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 22 January 2006 16:09
more more more!

please please please!

soon soon soon!
DARKANGELLOVESFIREFLY
Monday, 06 February 2006 08:25
Amazingly well written!!!!!!!!

I have read MANY stories in here lately and I must say that this is deffinately one of my fave's!!!!!!!!!!!

Bravo.

I will definately be reading more of your stuff.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 28 March 2006 01:28
This story was amazing. Will there be more?
Monday, 01 May 2006 13:10
Great writing and I absolutely loved it!

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