Pretty Fits Chapters 1-6
Wednesday, December 28, 2005
For a longer and less cliffhanged experience. Kaylee gets kidnapped, but that's not who they were after, Book's got a secret and River does too. Heck for that matter they all do. Put it all together for a more dramatic read.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3686 RATING: 9.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
Disclaim for mine tis not the genius mind behind Firefly. I only borrow the character to have a little fun with them.
Enjoy!
Pretty Fits
Chapter One
"Sweetie, don't get upset. It just takes a little patience, and...creativity on your part." Inara reached her arm to circle around Kaylee's shoulders and pull her close as they walked out of Inara's shuttle.
Kaylee sighed, "I know, Nara, I just get so tired of doin' all the work."
"Well, maybe we can find you something pretty in Newhall. A little shopping to get your mind off of the whole thing." Inara flashed a bright smile and Kaylee couldn't help but smile broadly right back.
Kaylee and Inara made their way down the catwalk and toward the kitchen.
Most everyone was already settled in their seats passing around the food. Mal at the head of the table as always, looked up at them as they entered and grinned. "Well, ladies, glad you decided to join us. Not up to any mischief I hope."
Kaylee grinned at the captain, "No, cap'n, just havin' a little girl talk."
Jayne grunted and dove into his food barely looking at anyone. Simon looked at Jayne with distaste and then looked over at River who was on his right. "How are you doing, River?"
Today hadn't been the best of days for River. Most days she was quite enough and only spouted her disjointed vernacular in small doses, but today she seemed to rant every few minutes.
"It's not associated. Parts can be parts…and whole can be whole…the whole can’t sustain without the parts…need bonding agent..” She continued to mutter inaudibly, rocking slightly back and forth, seeming to use her fingers for reference.
Simon stroked the back of her head and sighed, and Mal eyed River carefully.
“How is she, son?” Shepherd Book asked of Simon, his voice laced with concern.
“I’ve given her what I can today. She doesn’t seem to be responding to any of the medications I’ve tried. I had thought she was becoming more lucid, but-”
At that point Jayne belched loudly and Simon turned and glare
You've definately got us intrigied.
I love the fast-paced getting to it quickly writing.
Thanks for sharing your tallent.
Yup that would be me too...This is very good, and of course I am patiently (NOT) waiting for the next installment....(pretty pretty please-gorramit!)
Ooooh that hit home. flash backs to watching my bro after a double skull fracture and learning he'd be on the same for the rest of his life...Shivers for Kaylee...
OHHHH!! Here's Piffle's review that's goes on forever and ever... :P :P ;)
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(Of course you get a big fat 10!)
Inara had curled her hair and swept it up into a very attractive bun, letting a few tendrils fall free. Kaylee had even managed to not only be grease free, but she was wearing makeup.
I seemed to have missed out on somethings…Let me just say how I LURVE imagery! Paticurlary yours!! :D
Simon’s eyes widened unbelievably big and his eyes practically glued to her bare legs where she had moved her skirt up. He stood frozen in place unable to move or have any clear thought process whatsoever.
LOL He’s turning into Jayne!! AH!
Kaylee’s face contorted in confusion and then anger
Great word for her expression. “Contorted”
Simon’s face scrunched up in confusion and his mouth lay gaping open. He thought to himself, I am just not good at this. He moved his thumb and forefinger to pinch the bridge of his nose and then ran his hand through his hair.. Not good at all
Boob.
The largest one, who looked to be the leader, smiled in a way that sent shivers up her spine. “Got to thinking’ you might make some fine company.”
Still one of the best cliff-hangers out there.
I can’t…talking to Kaylee is difficult…I can’t-”
“Form full sentences and sound like a human being.” Wash filled in the blank
I love his humour and blunt-ness!!
A smile spread across her lips as she thought about how excited Kaylee got over anything that clicked or buzzed or hummed.
*snort* The twixting-nether’s line comes to mind… :P :P
One tear fell down her cheek as a barely audible whisper came from her, "Nara's dress...".
AWW! That can still make me well up...Im such a baby.
Two sides to the coin.....heads or tails...heads or heads...never tails...coin never lands right side up..."
Did I mention how you have her crazy talk down to perfection?
Doesn’t taste good …got the wrong one and doesn’t even know it…and now it’s ripped…” River looked into Simon’s eyes. “…she’s sad.”
Well this paragraph has a whole mess of meanings in it! I love it! See? A second reading clears everything up.
Good, good. He’ll be happy to hear that his wayward companion is due back
I think Ive had an epiphany. Atherton is doing this! YES! Wait..no.. Hmph. Im almost there!
When he couldn’t get her to rise on her own, he reached down and roughly grabbed her by the arms, hauling her up brutally. At the sudden rush to her head Kaylee went completely limp as she fainted.
NOO! That part always scares me…
Simon swallowed “Yes, yes. Of course. When she wakes up we have no way of knowing how she’ll react to her situation. Victims of head trauma often are very disoriented and confused. Everyone will need to allow her to adjust slowly. Also, since we don’t know what she experienced before she lost consciousness,” Simon said that last bit more like a question. “she may be in an anxious and possibly even hysterical state. I’d like to be with her as much as possible.”
Poor Kaylee..she’ll be terrfied when she wakes up…
Aw, silly, I’m not leavin’ you. I love you.”
MY FAVORITE LINE!!
That’s because Seung isn’t his birth name. His name is Aldrich Serra.”
DUN DUN DUN DUUUUNN!! Can anyone say Plot twist?!?!? My Atherton theory MAY have been squashed…
i came across this one because i saw you quote veggie tales and knew i had to read anything you'd done. i was not disappointed! truly, capital work my friend!
so . . . should i go back and comment on each individual one so that you can write faster? hmm. . .
So that's not the most flowery review I have ever undertaken but that was by far one of the best read I've had on this site. Just a wonderful tale.
You are a gifted writer..took me straight back to Serenity.
I thank you for that.
PS: have I mentioned the "write faster part"..or them umm.. need ending?
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