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"The Debt"

Saturday, December 24, 2005

"The Captain has a surprise destination for his crew. Someone else has a bigger surprise."

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TITLE: "THE DEBT"

AUTHOR: Alison M. DOBELL

FANDOM: "FIREFLY"

PAIRING: No specific pairing.

RATING: PG-13.

STATUS: Standalone Christmas story.

ARCHIVE: Yes. Just let me know where.

FEEDBACK: Welcomed.

EMAIL: AlisonMDobell@aol.com

WEBSITE: http://carlajane.50megs.com/Ali00.html

SUMMARY "The Captain has a surprise destination for

his crew. Someone else has a bigger surprise."

The usual disclaimers apply. The characters and 'Firefly'

are the property and gift of Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy.

No infringement of copyright is intended.

"THE DEBT"

"Firefly" story

Written by Alison M. DOBELL

* * * * *

By rights he should be dead. He knew that, of course. Above average intelligence illuminating all the shady corners of a colourful past. She had saved him, inadvertently but still. No touching guns. A dry disingenuous smile flirted with cold lips as he thought about his nemesis and considered. His life had been handed back to him, a gift. Funny how the prospect of imminent death brought everything into sharper focus. Like the loss of his parents. A tragedy seen only through the warped necessity of layers of lies. Layers that twisted the blood on his hands until it seemed more a blessing. Fabrications to make sense of the way his brain had been rewired. It seemed every time a thought traversered across the synatic gap another little piece of him was fried. The resulting short circuit often flicking the switch over to violence. It satisfied and soothed but ultimately left him with fewer targets for his unreasoned wrath. Each progression leaving him more hollow than the last. Was a man still a man if his soul was empty?

The introspection as he drifted was cathartic.

It took a return to the one environment that was truly his for all the cascading thoughts vying for his attention and understanding to coalesce into a plan. He had been given a gift. His response seemed suddenly clear. Smiling,

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 24 December 2005 02:07
Interasting, a bit morbid but I liked it all the same. Does that seem right to you?
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 24 December 2005 20:10
nice job getting inside Early's mind--and good gorram if that ain't a morbid, creepifyin' place to be!
~Kaynara
Saturday, 24 December 2005 21:07
"You gave me a gift, my life little one. I give yours back to you. I would wish you a Merry Christmas but don't think you'd be wishing me the same back - does that seem right to you? JE."

*smile* that's actually kind of sad but sweet to me. merry christmas.

b
Saturday, 24 December 2005 23:44
Hey, that was a really good story! You captured exactly the sort of Christmas story we probably would have seen on Firefly, had it ever gotten that far :sniff: Plenty of reminders of how much Mal cares for his crew and they care about each other, but the constant series of dangers and fears they face doesn't go away for the holidays. Believable treatment of Early, too.
Wednesday, 01 February 2006 22:20
Hmmm....Finally had time to start readin' your works of fiction and started with a one off...I liked it...I was afraid it was going to be a tragic end to the party, but liked what you did...nice twist.

I even felt a little sad for Jubal...although personally I think he is crazier than River ever thought about bein'...LOL

You did a wonderful job of painting a picture...LOVED the crews reaction to Mal's vacation spot...so true to form.

Sid
Friday, 04 November 2011 06:23
Darkly SHINY!!!

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