Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Reminiscence

Tuesday, November 15, 2005

A couple months after Serenity. in Kaylee's point of view on how the crew is dealing with things. Major Movie Spoilers.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2902    RATING: 8.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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this is my first Fanfic so please comment it isnt that great just somthing I have been thinking cbout since I saw the movie. I am all for constructive critisism but keep in mind I have a frail ego and I cry easily soo... enjoy!

Kaylee scanned the crowd at Persephone hoping against hope to see the Cap’n coming back.

No such luck. Kaylee’s hopeful face wilted, she had so wished to get out of here early, just being here was giving her goosebumps. All she wanted was to get back out to the skies, back to the total blackness were she could hide away from the memories.

It was odd how nothing had changed in such long a time. Here she was sitting in the bright sunshine outside Serenity, sitting in just the same way that she had been another day long ago. So little had changed that she was almost expecting the preacher to come walking out right now bearing his secret box of strawberries. Kaylee smiled with delight at the thought of those strawberries… they’d been so good.

That smile slid right off Kaylee’s face as quickly as it had appeared, the Shepard was gone now and there was no use workin’ herself up thinking about him. While the world outside stayed unmoving, never-changing, her Serenity had seen many a change.

She glanced down at the golden wedding band on her finger, not all the changes had been bad.. it was, in fact, this very same spot were she had first seen the only man who’d ever been able to tame her. Not only that but this place had also brought with it, River, the most extraordinary child she’d ever met. River was probably up in the cockpit right about now awaiting a call from Mal announcing their return she’d probably be playing with Bucky and Bob… she loved playin’ with those dinosaurs.

Zoë had thought that Wash woulda wanted River to take the little toys, she figured he’d of wanted someone who’d of loved them and gotten as much joy out of ‘em as he had.

Kaylee felt her eyes burning and quickly blinked away the tears. She worried a lot about Zoë, sure she put on a brave face but

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ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 01:42
Nice little story, a few grammer errors. A couple of them made it a little jarring in a spot or two but all and all it was good.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 02:26
CAT162ORD, You've got a good premise here, and I like what you've done with it. However, you have more than a few grammar errors. I see from some of your other posts that you're still in school, so my advice to you is to learn everything you can in your Language Arts/English class. Punctuation marks are your friends! Keep writing!
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 03:20
only thing that brought it down was the amounts of grammar. I liked very much how she was back where it all started, yet it was all so different. And *aw* when you mentioned the golden wedding band and even bigger *awwww* when the pregnant belly came into the picture.

continue?
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 11:49
i will not cry. i will not cry. dammit!!!

*looks up* HOW IS THIS ONLY A SEVEN?!?

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ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 16 November 2005 14:24
"Kaylee without cheerfulness was like Jayne without Vera"

I think you really captured Kaylee, sitting in the sun of Persephone thinking of that long ago day, of Shepherd Book and his box of strawberries (what a sad, but sweet, image). Caring so much about everyone, wathing Zoe shut down and the Captain blaming himself, wishing she could fix them ("cause that's what she was good at"). Being sad to see anyone she cares about sad, and I think a little guilty herself, about her own happiness in the midst of others grief (you showed that really well). And finally, Kaylee the eternal optimist hoping for better days. Shiny indeed.
Friday, 18 November 2005 02:17
misskitten if there is gonna be another it wont be for awile... i am not as good at coming up with ideas as you are in your Pretty ... pretty which by the way is amazing I dont post things ;less i come up with a really good idea... which does not happen very often.
Friday, 13 January 2006 13:01
Grammer errors?...only lawers care bout grammer errors...

You did good CAT1630RD.

let your participle dangle baby...and your spellin be bad.

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