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TEMPTATION SERIES: 30. "The Promise"

Wednesday, October 26, 2005

"Serenity arrives on Pacquin. Simon extracts a promise from the Captain. River pieces a puzzle together but the more she explains the less Inara understands."

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TITLE: "THE PROMISE"

AUTHOR: Alison M. DOBELL

FANDOM: "FIREFLY"

PAIRING: No specific pairing

RATING: PG-13.

STATUS: SEQUEL to "MOMENTS OF GRACE".

ARCHIVE: Yes. Just let me know where.

FEEDBACK: Welcomed.

EMAIL: AlisonMDobell@aol.com

WEBSITE: http://carlajane.50megs.com/Ali00.html

SUMMARY: "Serenity arrives on Pacquin. Simon extracts

a promise from the Captain. River pieces a puzzle together

but the more she explains the less Inara understands."

The usual disclaimers apply. The characters and 'Firefly'

are the property and gift of Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy.

No infringement of copyright is intended.

"THE PROMISE"

"Firefly" story

Written by Alison M. DOBELL

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They arrived on Pacquin a day and a half later. Jayne so all fired up and itching to be planet bound that it was almost funny. Mal knew he was driven more by the need to get laid than any restlessness from being stuck on the boat. Badger waved them as they were coming in to land and insisted that they let his contact get in touch before they arranged the pick up. The addendum made the Captain uneasy especially with knowing what a slippery character the little kingpin could be. Not sure if the man was setting him up or just being extra careful over the transfer of goods. Whatever the reason he intended to be extra careful and kept his concern from Zoe. Woman had enough on her gorram plate with the new addition. A little smile bowed his lips, who would'a thought Zoe would make such a gorram natural mother? All them hard edges smoothed out to accommodate that precious bundle of life. He got a kick out of seeing how married life and now motherhood had softened her. Given her back a love of life that had been torn from her in the war.

While they waited for Badger's contact, Milo, to get in touch the Shepherd made tea and Kaylee hummed and fussed with some kind of baked busicuit that stuck to the teeth like toffee but had eno

Comments
Wednesday, 26 October 2005 23:08
Gorramit, Simon. He can never leave well enough alone, can he? Perhaps Kaylee can straighten him out (maybe using a heavy engine part to make her point)?

I'm impressed with your way of writing Simon - you can see he actually uses that Top Three Percent brain to analyze the people around him, especially when he's considering Jayne. Of course, it wouldn't be Simon if he doesn't blow it in a grand fashion once in a while.
Thursday, 27 October 2005 11:43
true so true
Thursday, 27 October 2005 18:32
Uh-oh. Methinks there's a confrontation brewing between my favourite boys.

Meanwhile, Milo's an interesting character. It'll be interesting to see how he turns out and what decisions he comes to.
Friday, 04 November 2011 04:43
The quiet cultured voice became instense. No rise in tone but hardening like concrete the moment it sets.
Very good descriptive!!!! Great job on Simon too!

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