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Downtime

Tuesday, September 20, 2005

Sometimes you need to slow down to see how things really are. Sometimes you're forced to slow down. It's my first Firefly fic. I hope I did right by them.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4134    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Downtime

Mal woke up with a start, expecting to see the lights of battle, the blazing explosions of flashers flying low, of grenades and mortars hitting sand and rock. But his eyes fastened on the cool, comforting metal of the infirmary. He was on his ship. He was safe--Serenity had him.

"Ah, you're awake. How do you feel?" Simon walked over, pulling out some medicine from a drawer on his way.

"Don't be shooting me up with that before you even figure out what's wrong," Mal said, trying to pull away.

"Way ahead of you, captain. We're long past the diagnosis phase. Aren't we, Zoe?"

Mal turned his head, saw Zoe perched on the counter, legs dangling. She never did that unless she was bored to death.

"Been out a while, I guess?" He was hoping she'd hop on down and leave. Unconcerned Zoe was the way to go when wounds were the issue.

She didn't look unconcerned. "Sure were, Captain." Her smile was gentle, sharing a joke with him, then a different joke with Simon.

Mal must have been out for quite some time for these two to have forged a secret funny between them. "I don't know as I hold with this new closeness between you two. Wash approve?"

Zoe just laughed. "If it's helping you, Wash is fine with it."

"How long have I been out?"

"About ten hours." Simon put the monitor on Mal's finger, closing it so gently he barely felt the pinch. "I had to operate."

Mal started to sit up, but Simon's hand on his shoulder held him down. "The operation wasn't easy, Captain. I'd rather you didn't go and destroy all my good work."

"Man's not lying, sir. He worked a long time over you." Zoe finally hopped off the counter, looking as if she was ready to assist with the "keeping Mal still" operation. "And I helped, so I'm not real eager to see you tear yourself up trying to get out of that bed."

"Conspiracy of two. Someone else here who can weigh in?"

"I'm not supposed to be here." River's voice sounded from the doorway, but he couldn't see her. Then he realized

Comments
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 01:30
Oh yes, you did very right by them!

And you made my day. Wonderful story!
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 02:53
ETA:

Hah! I thought it was you. Welcome to Firefly fandom. I hope you'll be inspired to write more.

~~Moth (aka DangerMom in another fandom we share...)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 05:43
How touching! Was gettin' a mite weepy my own self towards the end, there...Loved it from start to finish. Good stuff!

Blue Bomber (too lazy to sign back in)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 06:19
Here via a link on the mal_inara lj community.

This was adorable. I especially loved the River/Mal snippets. : D
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 10:52
i second the weepy thing, you done so right by them, i think i'm gonna vomit with happiness...

b
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 13:34
Loved it! Very shiny

Got a little wierded out when Jayne started talking so frankly to Mal, but you made it work very nicely.
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 15:26
I don't usually read much Mal/Inara fic, but you sold me.

This was so sweet.

Well done.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 18:37
Perfect, start to finish. Thank you.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 21:30
Very good job. Great work on the characters, and neat twist having Mal warning River instead of Jayne.

You should consider a series. I'd like to see what happens next and what Inara/Mal come up with for a solution and if Jayne catches onto River.
Tuesday, 20 September 2005 23:38
At last! Inara and Mal have confessed they love each other and it only took Mal being at Death's Door to do it. No pressure! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 21 September 2005 01:30
This was fabulous! I haven't read that much Firefly fanfiction but you have the characters down so perfectly. Oh, River. I loved her in this. And I'm a little curious about this whole River and Jayne thing. And the sparring between Mal and Inara was wonderful and I loved it. This was excellent!

-Esther (triplefudge@livejourna)
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 21 September 2005 01:34
It takes a lot of skill to make a moment with vomiting sweet and tender. :D Excellent, in-character dialogue all the way around, and I about died of laughter when Mal decided that River's "weapon potential" was what drew Jayne to her. Very well done! :)

~Katinka
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 21 September 2005 07:58
Lovely.
Wednesday, 21 September 2005 21:53
Enjoyed this immensely and didn't want it to end. I hope you'll treat us to more Mal/Inara fanfics. There aren't very many.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 September 2005 08:59
WOAH. The perfect Mal/Inara fic.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 05 October 2005 13:28
Fantastic! Start to finish. Perfectly in character, whitty, shiney, heart-warming, chuckle-worthy; just perfect in every way.

I, myself, am a HUGE fan of Mal/Inara pairing, but even if you're not, this fic really just puts it all into perspective; they're perfect together.
Friday, 07 October 2005 02:09
Ah, a scene all Mal/Inara fans wish we could see! Lovely fic, everyone was so in character. Shiney.
Thursday, 13 October 2005 02:56
Thank you, that was such a great read.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 22 October 2005 15:28
Beautiful use of the way the characters speak, and real nice funny lines interspersed. Fits inreally well with what we know of them already. You keep writing, I'l keep reading.
SAGEALA
Monday, 31 October 2005 23:33
Great Mal/Inara chemistry. They're quippiness is what makes them so good together, and you wrote it well.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 01:57
Awesomeness, all around. Good characterization and just a touch of drama. Love this story!! Especially the ending-it's perfect.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 29 November 2005 11:46
awwwww, that was sweet :)

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