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Twice As Nice - Chapter 1: Down by the Docks

Sunday, August 14, 2005

A mystery wave, a mystery woman and a pilot with a big mouth

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3576    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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I do not own nor hold any claim to any characters or affiliated articles of Firefly. Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy do that. I am merely a humble fan who is scared of lawyers and can only dream of, one day, being even half as brilliant as Lord Whedon.

Bridge, Serenity

“Persephone, Eavesdown Docks, 1400hrs”

“Sir, got a wave here you might want to look at,” Zoë called from the console. Mal, setting down the data card he was examining, moved to stand by her shoulder.

“Any notion to the sender?” he queried.

“Runnin’ a check now, sir,” she replied. After a moment, the console screen blinked. “Sender put a block on it.”

“Probably Badger, got us a job,” Mal thought out loud. He looked down at Zoë. “Somethin’?” he asked her.

She swivelled her chair to face him, “Badger doesn’t usually put a block on his waves, sir. Could be a set up.”

Mal frowned. “The Alliance puttin’ on the heat, needin’ us to do a job quiet-like?” he suggested.

Zoë’s suspicion and discomfort were apparent on her face. “Could be Alliance, lookin’ for the doctor. Could even be Niska – I heard he was mighty sore after you punched him, sir.”

“Why Zoë, might that be a joke?” Mal asked in mock surprise, brows raised.

“Jayne!” River’s delighted yell jolted Zoë and the captain. She smiled at them innocently. Zoë and Mal exchanged a confused glance.

“River, honey, Jayne’s in the cargo bay with shepherd Book,” Zoë soothed, starting up.

“Jayne,” River repeated, a little more insistently this time. “She’s waiting for you. He sees her. She’s singing to him. He doesn’t like it. He talks of Simon as he lies. Simon… Simon? Watching from above. Flying. You know her, but not yet. Not yet. You forgot how to know her. But you’ll remember. We all will.”

Zoë paused, half-standing, and stared at River. River looked calmly and levelly, almost kindly, back at her.

“She’s waiting,” she said in a singsong voice.

Zoë’s gaze ticked over to meet Mal’s.

“Uh… sir?” she asked.

Something clicked into place inside Mal’s skull. “Set a course for Persephone,”

Comments
Monday, 15 August 2005 05:54
interasting start.
Monday, 15 August 2005 14:45
YAY!!!
see, i finaly read it.
shiny.
Monday, 15 August 2005 17:00
Oooh, wonder what the good gorram Jaine has to be mad at Simon for. Shiny start, can't wait to see what happens next. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 22 August 2005 15:04
For the story you were looking for on your Sunday blog:

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Tuesday, 23 August 2005 04:49
Wow!
Great start! I can't wait to read more! You really do have a knack for the character dialogue...I could hear each actor saying those lines... intriguing...can't wait to see where this goes! :-) Check out the story I wrote (my first attempt at Fan Fict) called "Along Came A Zhi-Zhu"...tell me what you think... :-)
~LarryL
Wednesday, 21 September 2005 19:52
good work, hun! (do you say that in scotland?)

*i liked the dialouge but was confused at the "softening" line. perhaps it's a set up, perhaps i don't understand . . .
*wash/zoe relationship seemed a little flat. w: i'm going to say something silly! z: i can kill you with my pinkie. there is so much more going on and your use of dialouge convinces me that if anyone's gonna show me something new- it's gonna be you!

GREAT!
Tuesday, 08 November 2005 16:21
Bravo!! Oooh! There's more to read (and I have to go to work... darnit!!)

Loved this line: “Forgive my husband, he’s a pilot,” Zoë said, glaring at him.

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