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Christmas on Serenity - Chapters 4 & 5

Saturday, December 28, 2002

A feast is prepared and everything is revealed. Here they are, the final two chapter! *complete*

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Chapter 4

In Which Preparations are Made for a Feast

The ship was still more or less intact on the afternoon of Christmas day. The same, however, could hardly be said for the kitchen, food in various stages of preparation, dishes, and other implements were strewn everywhere. And, of course, the oven was broken. Wash lay on his back underneath the antiquated contraption as Kaylee looked on, stopping occasionally to stir the pot that was bubbling on a burner.

“Well, do I have a second opinion?” Kaylee asked as he emerged from under the stove.

“Looks like one of the heating coils is busted,” Wash said. “The safety system won’t let the rest of them turn on,” he explained.

“That’s what I thought. We could try and bypass the safeties… We have to get this thing working! I have to use it to warm the ham!” Kaylee said.

“Ain’t really necessary, though,” Jayne said. He was sitting on a chair a few feet a way, expertly flicking potato peelings into a bucket between his knees with a wicked looking knife. “Ham’s already been cooked. We can just cut chunks off and eat it.”

“That’s disgusting!” Simon said, sticking his head into the kitchen to see what was going on.

“Sissy,” Jayne muttered, but otherwise ignored the doctor, who saw the confusion in the kitchen and made a quick get-away.

“I’ll tell you what,” Wash said to Kaylee. “You’ve got all the burners working, right? You just keep doing what you need to, and I’ll try and fix this thing.”

“Thanks, Wash,” Kaylee chirped, and went back to her cooking.

Book entered this lovely domestic scene with a bag of vegetables in one hand and a battered notebook in the other.

“I knew I had this recipe written down somewhere,” he said cheerfully, and opened the drawer nearest his hand and pulled out a knife. He drew an emerald green squash from his bag, and began to chop it into neat little circles.

A few minutes later, Simon was back. The sight of Kaylee bustling around the kitchen preparing Christmas dinner was simply too adorable to miss. This tim

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 28 December 2002 02:47
O WOW! This was GREAT!!!!!

So, are you going to write MORE????
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 28 December 2002 03:12
Amazing work! Keep it comming.
Saturday, 28 December 2002 05:06
Good, good, good.
Saturday, 28 December 2002 05:14
This was very, very good! I can't wait to read more of your work!
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 28 December 2002 08:28
That was simply excellent
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 28 December 2002 17:18
I really liked your story. Kept us on edge until the very end. Everybody was very well characterized (I could picture them perfectly in my mind) - a mirror for Zoe! (LOL!). The writing style was also excellent. Please keep writing.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 28 December 2002 17:18
I really liked your story. Kept us on edge until the very end. Everybody was very well characterized (I could picture them perfectly in my mind) - a mirror for Zoe! (LOL!). The writing style was also excellent. Please keep writing.

Goldenthorn74
HKCAVALIER
Saturday, 28 December 2002 20:17
That was great, well done. You seemed to capture the tone of the show very well with your chapter headings and description better than any of the other fanfics I've read. Your handling of Jayne was remarkably complex. I really got the sense of the length of his life, that he's been around and that his "stupidity" is a survival stratagy more than anything else.

And since you are obviously a skilled wordsmith and you prolly want some negatives to give the superlatives more meaning, I offer this minor, constructive criticism: the only two characters that were not absolutely spot-on for me were Simon and Wash. They lacked some of the great depth of the other characters.

Really great writing!

ILOVEJAYNE
Monday, 30 December 2002 18:36
Much fun. MORE! We need MORE!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 07 January 2003 12:10
Very subtle regarding book and Wash's gift was a nice touch. Makes me wonder what Simon would get Jayne as well Kaylee seems the type that would get everybody something just because she's Kaylee and Book would definitely want in.

pops

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