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Deep Waters Run Deeper, Chapter One: Out for a Walk

Wednesday, May 25, 2005

An open-ended adventure that picks up where the series left off--and blue-handed danger is about to strike.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2299    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Either the ship was losing atmosphere at a rate that would turn it into a death trap in a matter of minutes, or the cold she was suffering from had plugged up her nose to such an extent that breathing through it had become a problem.

River couldn’t be sure. Insufficient data.

She opened her mouth, and airflow recommenced.

She was hot. Her coat opened up as buttons moved through well-matched buttonholes, and it slid off her to the ground as she stretched out her arms behind her and leant backwards. Still hot. Her sweater was Angora wool. From goats. Not sheep. It went over her head, but there her arms got stuck in the sleeves.

Meanwhile, her feet kept going one in front of the other, carrying her where she was going, a complex system of muscular tension, balance and a connection to the deck beneath her boots that would paradoxically, inexorably fall apart if too much thought was applied to it.

“River? Child, are you all right?” She could hear the voice, but she could not see the man. The voice was serene, reassuring. It was the preacher. Book. Bible. More than he seemed. Quiet inside. Quiet, but warm.

“I’m fine. I’m stuck in superfluous garments.” He should have been able to see that. It was obvious, and he was not the one with the sweater over his eyes.

“Ha! Indeed. Well, let me give you hand with that.” Strong hands began to untangle the sweater. But he was doing it the wrong way! He was putting it back on her, not taking it off at all. She resisted.

“You should probably keep this on, River,” he said. “You have quite the cold. I could hear you coughing from my bunk last night.”

Her head plopped back out into the light again, the Angora-darkness receding as fast as sleep came after the needle. She shook her head. “My hair is a mess.”

It really was, half of the long strands still caught under the collar of her sweater, the rest curled over her face and on top of her head. Shepherd Book’s face was in front of her, smiling fatherly. *Her* father hadn’t come for her, and she’d waited and

Comments
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 13:28
Sweet, you have captured River very nicely. Keep it up!

Oh yeah, why is the crew on a frozen moon?
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 13:38
hmm I'm getting timeout errors whenever I try to get to BOS.tk. . .will you also be posting here?
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 13:56
I like this a lot. Shiny!!

You're reproduction of River is spot on - hope you're as good as this with all the other characters. If so will very much look forward to reading it!!
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 15:31
Don't know yet if I'll be posting the newer chapters here too... I want to get people over to the site, but I also want everyone on the entire Interwub to be able to read the story.

Maybe I should post the new chapters on the site first, and then post them here a while later. (Much as I've started out, since chapter two is already on the site now.)

"Oh yeah, why is the crew on a frozen moon?"

So that River could get a funny cold?
;)
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 15:56
Must say i was pretty impressed by how you had river. Thought it was one of the better attempts to capture the character and while there really isn't a lot to the story, I mean river is just sick so far is the whole story. But still it is interasting and looking foward to more.
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 20:59
I am enjoying this and looking forward to seeing where you take the story so hope you will continue posting on this site, having started to put the tale here it would be only polite to carry on and not disappoint those who are tuning in and giving feedback. I laughed out loud at Simon's reaction when River blew her nose, I could just image the look upon his face! "Yep, definitely my sister". Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 25 May 2005 23:47
Lookie lookie here :)

No need to tell you I loved the chapter (already did so on the bb board ;))! Need more :)

CCke :)
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 26 May 2005 21:39
Already admitted how much I adore this fic. It's so well-written and it really captures the essence of the show and its writing. Like I said before, I forgot I wasn't watching an episode!

Update soon pweeze!!
Huggles, Tan.
Tuesday, 07 June 2005 07:55
Good God, you have River down better than I have read in a while! BRAVO.

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