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War

Thursday, May 12, 2005

A little post "The Message" ficlet... nothing too fancy since it's my first attempt at Firefly Fanfic.

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TITLE: War

AUTHOR: Erin Giles

RATING: G

SUMMARY: Post "The Message". Just a follow up to what happened.

DISCLAIMER: Joss is Boss. Me no owny!

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No one spoke at dinner that evening, no one had any reason to. Wash and Zoë sat in sombre silence, Wash, a comforting hand upon Zoë’s thigh, Zoë a watchful eye on her husband as he deliberately played with his food, his appetite lacking this evening. Simon and Kaylee sat closer than usual, their hands resting close beside their knives between mouthfuls, fingers brushing each other’s hand subtly. Shepard Book sat in silent prayer for a long time before his hands even touched the cutlery on the table. Even River sat beside Jayne silently, watching every member of the crew sat round the table. Her eyes resting on Malcolm Reynolds for a long moment, he did not seem interested in his food, or in his surroundings and it didn’t take long before he rose and left. Eyes followed him out the Mess and soon the rest had departed, only Jayne left to eat what no one else had felt they could eat.

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Zoë lay down between the sheets next to her husband who watched her for a long moment before he reached out for her. She let him wrap his arms round her as she moved towards him, burying her head in his chest as she wept silently, something she had not done in the long time, “Bao bei.” He whispered softly as he ran a hand through her hair, holding her quivering body close to his. He would never understand what was between Zoë and Mal, could never understand what the war had created between them.

Zoë eventually pulled away and looked up into the crystal blue eyes of the man she loved, “I’m sorry.” She whispered as she reached up and gently touched the bandage that concealed the bullet graze. He frowned in pain before he pulled her towards him again, “Nothing to apologise for, Zo’.” He said softly, “War was just in his nature. “

*~*~*~*~*

“I was too young to remember the war, but my daddy told me plenty.” Kaylee said softly to Simon as they sa

Comments
Friday, 13 May 2005 01:05
Not a bad first effort. It's clear you understand these characters, their habits and their relationships. I'm interested to see how you handle an original storyline. Good, solid storytelling.
Friday, 13 May 2005 07:30
Loved this, especially the sombre thoughtful tone of the piece. One part that puzzled me was Simon and the line 'more wars on his hand that cut him more deeply than any veteran'. Think that needs qualifying as Simon is so young, what wars (in the plural) would he have witnessed or have knowledge of? And how could they cut him more deeply than any veteran? Very shiny, Ali D :~)
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Friday, 13 May 2005 20:36
Aww hun, angsty and depressing.. I loved it!! I think you got a good measure of the characters and how they would all react, although i could see Janye making more comments :)

Great work hunnie *hugs*
Saturday, 14 May 2005 10:50
That was so sweet. I love the implication that Mal can't walk, can't even crawl, but that Serenity carries him. Really touching.
But would Kaylee really be too young to rememver the war?? Wasn't it only about six years earlier?? That would make Kaylee in her teens during the war (assuming she is older than about 17)??
But anyway, it was a really good story, especially for a first attempt.
btw- Welcome to the world of Firefly fanfic!!!

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