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No Destination

Thursday, May 12, 2005

A week after preventing Jubal Early from obtaining River and Simon, Serenity crew is still searching for its next job.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3069    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Everyone on Firefly transport ship Serenity is standing shoulder to shoulder in the cargo bay - except River Tam, the genius child saved from Alliance experimentation by her doctor brother, Simon. Those in the line are blindfolded, many near sleep as supper was finished just moments before. River stands at the front of the line holding a large brown bowl. River, starting with Serenity captain Malcolm Reynolds, playfully asks each person to hold out a hand. Upon reaching each crew member - in order of Mal, first-mate Zoe Warren, her husband and pilot Wash, muscle-for-hire Jayne Cobb, ship preacher/counselor/conscience Shepherd Book, Simon and ship mechanic Kaylee Frye - eases each offered hand into the bowl, allows each person a few seconds, then removes the hand and asks each person to keep that hand by their side. At River's request, no one speaks while performing this task. Wash chuckled a bit as his turn came, Jayne gave his usual grunt, but no conversation was shared.

River (still playful): "Anybody?"

No response. Crickets, even.

River: "C'mon, it's easy."

Wash: "How 'bout a clue?"

River: "No clues. Too easy." River starts humming the Jeopardy theme - of course, no one else recognizes it. It's the future.

Jayne: "This is stupid. I'm taking this gorram thing off." River, in a flash, rushes to Jayne and slaps his hand.

River: "No peeking." Jayne grunts some more.

Several seconds pass. Still, no one speaks. Unheard, Book has been sniffing.

Book (with a hint of confusion): "River, did you just stick our hands in a bowl of mashed potatoes?" Everyone rips off their blindfolds.

River: "We have a winner!" River starts dancing around, runs up and hugs Book while the rest of the crew is cursing in Mandarin - Mal, Wash, Zoe, Simon and Kaylee in a dejected "I can't believe I didn't guess that" manner, leading to a good bit of laughter. Jayne is pissed.

Jayne: "What's so gorram funny? We been eatin' nothin' but raw protein for weeks, finally get somethin' worth enjoyin' and she wastes this on a g

Comments
Thursday, 12 May 2005 20:12
I know it's a bit chatty - I've never written fanfic before. I know the title says "No Destination" - but I do have one. Just wondering if anyone thinks it's worth it to keep going?
Thursday, 12 May 2005 20:34
Chatty? Nothing wrong with that, I really liked this and chuckled at Jayne and the mashed potato and how he suddenly reappeared at the first mention of gold. As for Jubal being able to survive on emergency oxygen for a whole gorram week that is harder to believe but can't wait to see where you go with this. I can't believe this is your first fic, very shiny dialogue. Well done and keep going, *dong ma*? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 12 May 2005 20:39
Well I always like a good story, and you have a good premise here. But I have some some critical feedback (hope you don't take this the wrong way), 1) I thought you made Zoe a bit to chatty (but good job on Book!) 2) Book's encyclopedia(s)is just the one "reader" i thought, like a PDA. Anyways, hope you update soon.

-Canton
RAT
Thursday, 12 May 2005 21:12
Keep going!Keep going!Keep going!Keep going!


Different, but in a good way! I like the script format, makes for a much easier read, nothing ruins a good story like not knowing who's talking!!

As for the encyclopedia, I thought it was Simon's.


Keep going!Keep going!Keep going!Keep going!
Thursday, 12 May 2005 21:18
Crap. It was Simon's.

Oh wait. Book had one, too. Yeah. That's it.

*crap*

OK, act like I said Simon. I'll make it make sense later.
Friday, 13 May 2005 03:42
The encyclopedia was Simon's. Book borrowed it to check on marraige rites.

Loved Jayne popping out when gold was mentioned.

Please, do continue.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 13 May 2005 07:48
*gasps* Mrs Early!!

I really enjoyed this. I like chatty :)
Poor Mal, Inara left... :(
Sunday, 15 May 2005 21:00
I'd definitely like to read more. And Jubal's mom...could she be the reason he is so screwed up? I can't wait to find out!

Keep up the good work! =o)
Monday, 16 May 2005 15:47
FYI, I edited it to fix my little mistake (Simon's encyclopedia, not Book's).

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