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Adrift: Part One

Saturday, August 30, 2003

The crew of Serenity find themselves in dire straights. Mal is faced with the toughest choice of his career

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This is a fanfic. These characters aren't mine. They belong to either Fox, Mutant Enemy, or Joss Wheton, or all of the above. Don't sue me for copyright infringement.

“ADRIFT”

Part One

Dramatis Personae

Captain Elsa Schroeder

Pilot

Malcolm Reynolds

Jayne Cobb

Kaylee Frye

Wash Warren

Zoe Warren

Simon Tam

(sound of footsteps coming closer on a metal floor)

Captain Elsa Schroeder: (thick German accent): What the Hell are we slowing down for?

Pilot: We’ve been hailed. A crippled freighter is adrift and will enter Newhall’s atmo in less than 20 minutes. Looks like all they have is life support and communications.

Captain: It is not our problem. Let the authorities handle it.

Pilot: No authorities around, Captain. We’re too far out on the rim.

Captain: What about the planet’s…?

Pilot: The settlement’s too small and besides, it’s on the other side of the world. They wouldn’t make it in time.

(a moment of silent contemplation)

Captain: Did they hail us, or did they send out a general S.O.S.?

Pilot: General S.O.S. Why?

Captain: Ignore it. Don’t stop. Don’t answer the hail. Keep going.

Pilot: Captain?

Captain: You heard me. If they’re reavers, they’ll kill us. If they’re pirates, they’ll kill us and take the cargo, and if they just take the cargo and let us live, Niska will kill us. I’m not putting ourselves in that position. We cannot afford to make ourselves easy prey.

Pilot: We don’t even know if they are reavers or pirates. It’s an unarmed freighter. You can’t just let them die. (silence) You’re sentencing them to death, you know!

Captain: Better them than us. You have your orders.

*

Jayne: Kaylee? Move your gorramn head! I can’t see.

Kaylee: Go look out another window.

Jayne: I was here first, dong ma ?

Kaylee: I don’t see you’re name on this window.

Jayne: Yeah, well I don’t see yours!

Mal: Both of you, quiet.

Jayne: But, Mal, She’s pushing me.

Kaylee: But Cap’n. He st

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 30 August 2003 02:44
I like the story line, and can actually see it as the start of an 'aired' ep, since it seems just the kind of crime scheme Josh might pen for Mal & Co. My only complaint is the style of writing. Personally, I'm not fond of the 'script' style as I think it detracts from the personality of the characters and puts too much emphasis on movement, etc.. instead of emphasizing characterization or story. I'll keep reading tho to see what happens with the other ship and their employer. :)
STILLSHINY
Saturday, 30 August 2003 04:12
Hey you got a + from me. Looks shiny REB. Couldn't help but notice the German accented character. You are a crazy one my friend.
Saturday, 30 August 2003 12:33
john,
this really hooked me, plus you made me laugh with "elsa schröder" :o) i'm looking forward for part 2 to find out what happens next, don't let me wait too long.
Saturday, 30 August 2003 21:51
I really like this and can't wait to see where you are going with this story line. Keep up the good work! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 01 September 2003 13:57
sounds shiny!

cool first fanfic. keep writing.

I'm just not too good at feedback. all I can say there's nothing there that sounded wrong to me.

and if there's no other german available (see how I'm already trying to get out of it) I'll gladly do my part and impersonate the evil captain Schröder (does that work out on your screens?). but I can't promise a too heavy accent, I never much sounded like all the other germans trying to speak english. just not like a native speaker either.
...ahhh, I really don't know what I sound like, maybe I should try some lines and let you guys be the judge of that.

@all
now we have so many shiny scripts here we really have to start 'playing' some of them.

Idefix

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