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Liberty Station: the Chronicles of Phantom 309

Monday, March 10, 2014

A storyline idea, I had, it is set within the firefly verse. However, it is a new ship and crew. Please keep in mind, this is still rough draft form. So any feedback is welcome good or bad. long as it is not there is no Wash, Mal its not Firefly.

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Chapter 1

Shadow

Finally, after two months of holding the Alliance Forces, they sounded a retreat. As the Alliance turns and retreats, I look over as Hammer says.

“Lieutenant”

“What is it Sergeant”

“Sir, command is sending a shuttle to pick you up, they want debriefed on the battle.”

“Very well, Sergeant I want you to come with me, need you to organize a resupply for the platoon.”

When I look out at what is left of the platoon, some of who survived often surprises me, like private Willey, he was a timid and often seen as somewhat cowardly, that reminds me… Private Willey is to receive the Independent Star. I will take great pride in presenting, him with that.

“Sergeant Hammer”

“Yes, Sir.”

“When we get to Central Command remind me about Private Willey.”

“Check, Sir.”

“While I got you here, call the platoon to formation.”

“Will do, Sir.”

I walked to the platoon and Sergeant Hammer took her place with the Platoon. “Phantom 309 at ease, I would like to congratulate each and every one of you. These past two months have been hard, but we sent those cowardly Purple Bellies packing. We have been through a lot together. I have witnessed this platoon come together as a unit. The death of Lieutenant Warsaw was hard on us all. I have seen soldiers grow into true fighters of the Independence. For my first command, I could not ask for a better group of soldiers. I have seen some conquer their fears; others rush of to fight when they should stay put. A Private may have second, guessed my first impression. This individual, I first thought to be the cowardly type, then display an act of bravery. While under enemy fire, charged to rescue Lieutenant Warsaw. He picked him up and ran 950 meters to medical. This soldier, Private Willey front and center” The platoon gasped in shock as the private walked forward. “Central Command has informed me that General Westland will be coming to present the Independent Star one of the Army’s highest awards, and also I have been approved to promote you to Corporal. This is for your

Comments
Sunday, 20 July 2014 22:32
I will confess -- I was pretty excited to see an OC storyline here and clicked on your link eagerly! But when I realized the fic wasn't formatted, I stopped reading.

I don't consider myself a member of the Grammar Nazis (mostly because I commit my fair share of word crime), but generally something isn't comfortably readable if you don't at least give us paragraph breaks. So -- reformat your effort, please? So that you don't torture your otherwise-willing readers?
BISHOPHALL
Sunday, 20 July 2014 22:50
Thanks Cooper, I copied and pasted Liberty Station from my draft copy. But I was in a hurry so I will maked a point to reformat here soon. But I will probably wait until I get my rough draft back from a friend doing some editing work on. So look for the rewrite soon. Where I will take xtra care in the formatting.

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