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Tales From the Nordic Troll - #1: Fight Night (part 4)

Sunday, February 24, 2013

The board is set, the pieces are ready to move...

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The mess area was an open compartment with hinged shelves attached to the walls that served as tables. Most of the crew sat on stool seats that pivoted down from the tables. Gerrin stood at the front of the compartment. “So”, Gerrin said, “That’s the plan: I’ll go in the ring and keep their attention, Doc will go with me to make sure I stay alive. Aldous will go lift the landlock. As soon as he’s done, he’ll head back to the ship. Jaime and his crew will break into the bank and empty the boxes that belong to the Alliance. The locals won’t want to admit to a robbery, so they’ll try to cover the loss with their own money and keep it under the rug. Once we’re done, Loomie and Aldous will lift us all out in the Troll, then we’ll fly once around the planet under the radar and come back here to the contact point and drop off the town’s share. Any questions?”

Loomie was first. “Why do you have to go in the ring? We can find other ways of keeping them busy”.

Reilly answered “Because he’s going to be fighting for the money to pay for the landing fees. Also, he’s an outsider. Locals always like to see an outsider get beat up”.

Loomie protested “But that’s it. These guys do this all the time. We just move cargo. And-” She hesitated. “No offense- but these guys are a little younger and stronger than you”.

Doc spoke next “I have to agree with Loomie. This is potentially dangerous”.

“Hey”, Aldous joined in. “Nick’s just going in the ring. What’s gonna happen when these guys catch me breaking into their secure building and tampering with a landlock?”

“Maybe you’d rather go in his place and act out a movie for them?” Loomie retorted.

“Now wait a minute, everybody’s got hobbies they don’t talk about”, Aldous protested. “You didn’t complain about the still, did you?”

Gerrin put a stop to it. “Alright. We’re all agreed that this is dangerous. But this plan is sound, and I’m not exactly hobbling in there on a cane. As long as we stick to it, this will work.” Somehow he didn’t quite sound con

Comments
Wednesday, 23 July 2014 23:12
You have nice pacing and nice action here, but Anna's lack of solid motivation for taking such a risk sort of threw me -- she's the widow with a kid, from the previous chapter, right? If Pol Pot walked through the door of my business, I wouldn't follow him and pull a gun on him when he's chatting with his mooks -- certainly not if I had a kid at home who would be orphaned if those killers took me out first. I'd report him to the local authorities, even if I didn't trust them. After all, there might be some sort of Alliance reward (and once the Alliance showed up, maybe they might be encouraged to do something about the local authorities as well, considering media attention being drawn here by the capture of a wanted war ciminal/fugitive...) I understand Anna's actions here were necessary for Gerrin's backstory revelation, but it just struck me as exposition driven, rather than true to the NPC. But that quibble aside (and it's a minor quibble), you continue to hold my attention and leave me wanting to come back for the next episode!
Thursday, 24 July 2014 04:25
Anna lives on Verbenna in a town where you can't always rely on the "authorities" to do the right thing (remember Jayne on Ariel?). Lots of people take matters into their own hands for odd reasons: thoughts of reward, and inflamed sense of righteousness, desire to avenge loved ones. Plus, she could have been wrong. After all, Nikolai Turgenyev was dead, according to Alliance records, so she might have just been making a fool of herself.

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