Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Gift Horse

Friday, September 24, 2004

Kaylee's birthday goes a bit better than Simon's, in that no one gets critically injured. Set sometime not too long after <i>Objects in Space</i>. Simon/Kaylee, Mal/Inara (yeah, she stuck around... wouldn't you?)

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4312    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/N: My first post here... I hope y'all like it! Thanks to LJC and Ying for the Mandarin dialogue help. I've probably still got stuff wrong... if anyone catches anything, please let me know.

Gift Horse

Kaylee was certain that her smile was in danger of actually splitting her face in two. She loved birthdays, and though her daddy probably would’ve blushed to know he’d raised such a selfish child, she had to admit that she loved her own birthday the best. She’d been lucky this time around, too—presents and parties aboard Serenity were always something of a crapshoot, but they’d cleared a tidy profit on a job a few weeks back, which meant that the table in front of her was littered with presents and she had the remains of a fine breakfast in her belly.

She let her eyes drift over her treasures, drawing out the moment as long as possible. Even though it was first thing in the morning, they’d already eaten most of the cake, made with real chocolate and flour and eggs that Kaylee was sure Shepherd Book must have had to go to God Himself to find. There was a new automatic wrench from Zoë and Wash, self-adjusting and self-rotating; there was a whole box of only-slightly-used spare parts from Mal, because he knew there was no challenge in brand new ones; Jayne had cleaned, oiled, polished, and sharpened all her tools; River had given her a detailed and lifelike drawing of Serenity just firing up, rolled up and tied with a lacy purple hair ribbon; Inara’s present was more of a promise, the prospect of a shopping trip for a fine new dress the next time they docked on a proper planet.

That just left Simon’s gift, a carefully, colorfully wrapped box that she had saved till last on purpose. Through her eyelashes, she looked at him across the table, basking in the light in his eyes and the grin on his face. He did that more often now—finally, after months aboard Serenity, he actually seemed to be loosening up a bit—and every time he did it, she had to think that

Comments
Friday, 24 September 2004 03:10
Wow! You had the characters down perfect. Great story, great writing, just great all around!
MAI
Friday, 24 September 2004 10:06
Wonderful story. Very original. I agree you have the characters down perfectly!
HURRYSUNDOWN
Friday, 24 September 2004 14:01
Just lovely - nicely plotted, good character voices, sweet but not schmoopy. All in all, a very enjoyable story. Now, would you like to tell us the story about Inara staying? *g*
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 September 2004 14:59
Amazing and wonderful. Thanks for sharing such a sweet story. Can't wait to read more.
Friday, 24 September 2004 16:32
Wow. That was a well rounded story. I agree with Hurrysundown, the character voices were perfect. You captured the spirit of the show.
The mandarin translation glossary's a good idea too. It's helpful.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 September 2004 19:24
“I memorized it.”

Perfect! I think this one really nailed the various characters (right up to Mal maybe-possibly just checking on Simon, but not really knowing if he is or not, he's that shuttered). Best story I've read here, and I don't say that lightly.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 26 September 2004 06:02
I loved it,
excellent writing, plot progression, characters.

WONDERFUL!
SAPPHYRE
Monday, 27 September 2004 22:43
Wow...awesome story! Very well written, I couln't leave the screen to close the window even though its freezing in here! Please write more!
Tuesday, 28 September 2004 03:14
Lovely story! Very nicely done.
Wednesday, 29 September 2004 04:47
Brynn, I justwanted to tell you again that I loved this story. I reread it tonight, and I have to say it's now one of my favorite Firefly fics. Sweet and funny, great interaction all around. I really hope you are inspired to write more.
AURORAJADE
Wednesday, 29 September 2004 19:49
Thanks so much for a great read. i really enjoyed it and would love to read more.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 02 October 2004 02:19
I loved it! This was truly beautiful. When's the next one coming?
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 10 October 2004 17:41
I have to say this is one of the fictions that makes it a bit les hurful that fierly is of the are. Thank you for leting me se my fainda again of the screen but still true to themslef and just as lively and specel as always.Fey Hoi Mai
Tweedy bird
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 09 November 2004 06:37
Wan mêi, first of all. Second of all, maybe it's just the part of me that's always looking for a triple X throw-down, but I need some horizontal mambo descriptiveness. The "curtains parting in the breeze as the camera fades to black" just as we get to what could be the juicy parts is just----bad. Just kidding, loved this whole shiny tale. Nicely, nicely done. Thank you!
---Roving Eye
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 22 November 2004 23:35
Strong characterizations, and the dialogue felt pretty authentic. Nice work!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 04 January 2005 20:03
i thought this was such a good story. it was sooooo sweet and like everyone else said you really got the characters right. i could see the scene in my head like it would have been had it been on the television.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 12 January 2005 12:22
absolutly bloody fantastic

lingren jingyi
Sunday, 16 January 2005 22:37
Loved the story! Perfect job of displaying the characters. Keep up the good work!
JAZMYN
Monday, 31 January 2005 08:00
love the story it is great and i like that u fianly got simon and kaylee together in on the tv they never get together so i love the story
jazz
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 17 February 2005 05:57
This was amazing! I loved it. Write more soon.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 30 May 2005 03:17
This was *gorgeous*. I'm new to the FF fandom, but I've already developed a huge obsession with this 'ship, and I do believe this is the best S/K fic I've read yet. You captured everyone - not just Simon and Kaylee, but River and Inara, and even Book and Mal - just perfectly. Great work! :D
BELLONA
Thursday, 25 August 2005 20:57
it made me clap like a seal and squeak like inara... wish my brithday were like this, except less crying and screaming :o)
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 06 October 2005 04:20
That was amazing. It was very well written, the characters remained very in character, and the storytelling flowed beautifully.

I've read this fanfic so many times that I can almost say it word-for-word. It's my favorite. ^_^
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 30 October 2005 09:35
*more* please let us have more, I've read this fic over and over again... It's the most amazing Simon/Kaylee fic I've ever laid my eyes on. I need more!
Sunday, 29 January 2006 04:50
My god. That is hands down the best S/K fic I have every read. Excellent writing. Wonderful topic. Inara eavesdropping at the end was just perfect. Just. Wow. Excellent work. I hope I find more stories by you!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 09 March 2006 08:51
First Firefly fic I've ever actually read - looks like I picked a good one. :)
Saturday, 18 March 2006 21:40
That was great! Leiasky recommended it to me and I'm so glad - terrific balance of Simon and Kaylee exploring their insecurities both together and apart.

It makes perfect sense that Kaylee would know the saying "Horse can't love a fish" and put it in context to her relationship with Simon - I just loved that little detail. Write more!
Saturday, 20 May 2006 15:49
I just loved everything about this! What a wonderful story! Simon memorizing the speech was so perfectly him and Kaylee just knocking him on the shoulder, I love it! Great story!
Saturday, 02 December 2006 06:08
“’Night, ’Nara!”
Made me LMAO.

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