Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Overlooking Paradiso

Monday, May 11, 2009

Mal and Zoë take on Niska. This breaks my 500 word rule, so I reset my aim to a 1000 words or less. I hope you enjoy.

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Zoë stands on a tall hill overlooking the assigned valley near Paradiso and says, “Nice place for an ambush.”

Mal looks around and answers, “That it is.”

Zoë responds, “Don’t think it’s a good spot, Sir. He’ll have an advantage over us.”

Mal answers, “Everyone always does.” Mal turns his head towards Zoë and asks, “Does this seem like Déjà vu to you?”

“It always does Sir, but he ain’t gonna be like Patience on Whitehall. We hit him hard the last time and he has to re-earn some reputation against us. He’ll hit us with everything he’s got.”

“Yep, that’s what I figure,” answers Mal.

“He’ll have sniper teams Sir, not just snipers. Do you really think Jayne will be able to help us out here?”

“Yep.”

“How will Jayne be able to take out Sniper teams? They’re trained against guys like him.”

“He won’t. Jayne is doing something else.”

“Sir, don’t you think Niska and his forces will see this one coming?”

“No they won’t see this one coming.”

“What’ve you got planned Sir?” asked Zoë.

“We’ll have some reserve forces of our own.”

“Who would that be Captain?”

“Well we have Badger and Fanty & Mingo who will be planet side very shortly and of course Mr. Universe, and all their forces.”

Zoë looks at the back of Mal’s neck for a moment before asking, “Sir, do you really think they’ll be here with enough forces to help us out?”

“They have to with all we’ve got on them, don’t they?”

Zoë looks around the valley again and replies, “Yes Sir, I reckon so.”

“Let’s get back to the shuttle,” instructs Mal.

Inside the shuttle Zoë goes through the ignition sequence when she asks, “What was all that back there about Badger, Fanty & Mingo and Mr. Universe? They’re all dead.”

“Didn’t you get the feeling we were being watched?” answers Mal, “I had to give some misinformation to strengthen out tactics.”

“What are we really doing in that valley Sir?” asks Zoë.

Mal looks at Zoë with a smile on his face and answers, “The one thing nobody would expect.”

Zoë thinks about what

Comments
Monday, 11 May 2009 15:38
Hee! I like your title, it's kind of a funny double play, because Niska's PRETENDING to overlook Paradiso, and they're by Paradiso.

Yeah, anyway.

I also appreciate the idea of Mal outsmarting Niska by using the Alliance against him. If pressed, Mal really will use unsavoury means to accomplish his objectives, won't he?

Although, honestly, I'll take one out of Inara's book and say that I wish he'd just killed the old bastard. He'll probably get out eventually and be on the look out for revenge. And I hope Mal's collusion with the law doesn't bite him in the ass: the criminal world doesn't much care for snitches, honest and fully justified if they are.
Monday, 11 May 2009 16:05
I originally had it so Mal was telling Zoe that he had Inara and Jayne doing these things, but I decided against it so people listening or reading his lips won't know that he snitched. I figure Mal had just about everything which was going to be said planned, even his discussion with Niska.
Monday, 11 May 2009 22:50
*Wei*, one of Mal's plans went super Shiny - I call that a Big Damn Win! Nice an drefreshing for things to go right for our Heroes for a change. Thanks. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 12 May 2009 09:58
I never thought that maybe this plan went too well for Mal and Zoe after all, but then again it started out with Mal and Zoe standing on a hill overlooking a valley and turned into what it is. I suppose I should have put a few monkey wrenches in the works, but that would have blown my word count way out of target.
Saturday, 16 May 2009 00:38
Very well done. I envisioned two or three different plans as I read, but this one I didn't see coming.

Good stuff!

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