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The Nature of Life

Wednesday, June 25, 2003

About 20 years later.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3600    RATING: 5.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The nature of life:

Captain. It still had a funny ring to it, as he surveyed the console of his ship. HIS ship, a newer model GenDy 401. He took a moment sitting in the cockpit, feeling his controls, the controls for his ship. And smiled.

“Captain?” came a tiny voice from the hatchway. The Captain turned and faced the freckled face kid, barely 16, and the two adults behind him. Wiping her greasy hands on a rag, “she’s got a few minor nits that need tending to, but nothing to keep us grounded. Nothing to keep us out of the sky.”

“Us?” the captain barked back, trying to look angry, more for the benefit of the adults than the kid.

The kid looked down at his feet. “Well, you will be needing a mechanic, and mom’s taught me all she knows. I’ll work hard and won’t eat much.”

The graying gentleman behind him smiled at the girl. “Its all she’s been talking about since you told us about this. Her mother is not that pleased about it though, said I should talk to you first.” The woman standing next to the gentleman elbowed him in the ribs, swept past him and surveyed the cockpit next to the Captain.

Captain eyed the child, looked at her father, then over at his own wife. “What does Auntie have to say about it.”

The lady grin mischievously. “It’s the Captain’s ship. His decision. But Auntie thinks it’s a good one.” She plopped down in the captain’s lap.

“Have you checked all the systems? Or just the engine room.”

The young girl’s eye got a kind of look, like she had forgotten something important, and not sure how it would affect her job interview. “Um… I will right away.”

“You do that, while I talk to your Pa a minute. Check the laundry and the galley, make sure they all work.”

The girl left at a run. And once gone, Captain looked up at the graying gentleman. He sat in the other seat, facing the captain and his wife, sighing.

The Captain started, “Look, Tracey is a great kid, and I know she knows how to turn a wrench. I could,” looking at his wife, “we could, really use her. But if you say

Comments
Wednesday, 25 June 2003 18:36
I found this little glimpse of future very enjoyable once you started using names. A bittersweet little piece. I think that if you polished up the grammar and the style it could be a great jumping off point for a bigger (or more) stories. And having Jayne, married to River, call his ship "Ariel" is just inspired.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 26 June 2003 00:58
BC

Whoa! Is that was all that about. Boy, I'm getting slow. But it was nice and things have changed. But still the same.
Friday, 27 June 2003 14:24
I was trying to, I don't know, spring it on the reader, hook them with the story before explaining it too much. Oh, well, will try better next time.

Thanks for the comments
Monday, 30 June 2003 00:09
I really enjoyed this,

Simon and Kaylee married with a child

Jayne grown up and married to a recovered River

Mal, always the father figure

Makes me want to know where Zoe and Wash are. Or for that matter Book and Inara?

Always leave them wanting more, right?
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 01 July 2003 14:07
Without using names I was totally confused at the onset of the story and unable to enjoy it. Once you started using names it helped, but I had to go back every couple of Paragraphs or so and keep reading backwards in order to understand what was taking place. 20yrs is a long time and people can change as your story showed. You tried to "hook them with the story before explaining it too much" although more explaining in this instance would be appreciated.
I'd love to read this at a later date if you decide to tweek this story a bit.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 02 July 2003 21:09
I just love it! I would've like to know a little bit about the others but the Simon - River - Jayne arc was always one of my favorites on the show. And this is the kind of "ending" for the 3 of them I would've liked to see.

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