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Passing through the storm - Part One (Repost)

Monday, December 10, 2007

As disquiet begins to settle across the 'verse, the gang set their course to a world rebelling against the Alliance.

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"Please, mei-mei, don't kill the hwoon dahn!" Simon called across Serenity's cargo hold.

River Tam looked back at him for a moment, not entirely withdrawing her attention from the two space-suited goons who were the subject of discussion. "I wasn't *going* to do anything fatal," she told him in her best witheringly sisterish voice. "Just beat on them a little while."

"Hmm." Simon considered that, coming closer. "Beating is okay. Maiming is not."

Just at this point, one of the goons seemed to have come to the notion that even though this little slip of a girl had managed to take him and his friend by surprise the first time around, there wasn't any chance that she really COULD bring the beat-down now that he was ready for her tricks, and pulled out a knife from a small opening in his trousers, under one thigh. River actually smiled a fierce little smile as she jumped into an arcing roundhouse kick, dashing his face to one side. The sharp blade slid across fingers, drawing blood, before it clattered away on the deck.

By a few minutes later, most of the crew were gathered around the prone bodies of the two mercenary bounty hunters, and River was nearly beaming at the fact that they weren't trying for any more rematches. "Well, umm, that's mighty impressive," Zoe pointed out. "But we're not out of trouble yet. Serenity is tethered to the ship that they came in on, their boss has a small magnetic rail gun at the ready, and I doubt that even you can pilot us out of here well enough to avoid getting the ship riddled with holes, girl."

"Yes, that's a problem," Mal Reynolds said in a low tone. The ship was two days out of Persephone's dockyards, where they'd repaired an awful lot of damage, and only about a day away from the Heinlein planetary system, to return Inara Serra to the Paquin Companion training house where she was an instructor. Mal had been keeping an eye out for trouble, but by the time anybody had spotted the bounty hunter's ship it had been too late - their efforts to evade its intercept cour

Comments
Tuesday, 18 December 2007 04:44
The good thing about the evil hack is that I am getting a chance to see gret new stuff that I somehow missed the first time around. I am realy enjoying this one.
Monday, 01 December 2008 12:21
This is a wonderful opening chapter Chrisk. Rich in description and characterisation.

I loved the River/bounty hunter fight at the start. 'Beating is okay. Maiming is not.' :D Great line!

I could vividly picture River taking down that bounty hunter with a roundhouse kick..

There were a lot of good interactions with the characters. I enjoyed Jayne and Zoe's talk in the cockpit (especially the part about revealing the betrayal on Ariel), Inara and Mal's discussions, and Kaylee/Simon's.

I also liked the fact that Inara's wardrobe was described a couple times, whenever Mal encountered her. The reader is completely in Mal's head.

I liked the notion of Inara having to dress down, due to a lack of wardrobe after the BDM, and borrowing clothes from Zoe. I can imagine that happening for real in an episode, next movie or comic.

The fact that River could figure out how to pilot the bounty hunter ship so fast, and Mal's surprise was a nice touch.. Funny and completely in character!

Zoe's rail gun comment was funny too.

I've always wondered where and how Kaylee and Simon would bunk together. The 'knocking down of walls' makes sense.

Yeah.. This was really solid storytelling.. The chapter flowed well, holding my attention, and it was written in a vivid, real time fashion.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Will read asap.

10/10

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