Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL
Enemies
Tuesday, August 24, 2004
Everyone has them. The crew of the Veangeance learns some are deadlier than others.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 2743 RATING: 7.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
Enemies
Written by R. T. Byers
No infringement of copyright is intended. All recognizable items are the property of Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy. However, the story and all original characters are mine.
Captain Tim “Dual” Raynor fell face first to the floor. He gasped in pain as he slammed hard against the steel, breaking open newly healed wounds. The floor was bowl shaped and had a drain in the middle, to which all of his blood was currently flowing. He thought back on the recent events that had led him here and smiled wryly.
A pair of heavy boots stamped to in front of his face. Dual looked up to his tormenter, who had a malicious gleam in his eye, and spat. Rage contorted the man’s features, and he kicked Dual in the face, sending him reeling into darkness.
* * *
Two days earlier...
The clack of wooden swords connecting echoed through the Vengeance’s cargo bay. Dual stared into Phoenix’s eyes, trying to ignore how uneasy they made him. He had asked Phoenix to come down and demonstrate some sword techniques for the morning’s self defense training. He had learned Phoenix carried a pair of wooden katanas with him, and challenged him to a fight. He had not fathomed the man was this good. He used moves Dual did not even know existed.
Dual blocked the pilot’s slash just in time. Phoenix grabbed Dual’s throat, then hit him on the head with the hilt of his sword. Phoenix kicked Dual to the ground, then spun his sword around and jammed it downward, stopping the wooden blade just before it touched Dual. Phoenix bent down and helped the captain to his feet, Dual clutching his chest.
“Are you alright Captain?” asked Phoenix.
“Shiny,” said Dual, “ ’Cept for all those times you tried to run me through with your sword.”
Dual looked over to Hank “Tech” Lee, his mechanic, an
Comments
Wednesday, 25 August 2004 08:00
Nice work! Good story and plotting. The characters developing even more from the previous story. Interesting events. I kinda dug the sword stuff--nifty.
If you don't mind a suggestion, you might even let a lot of your scenes go longer, as long as they're flowing smoothly. Some of the scenes felt a touch hasty, as though you were pushing the info out fast and terse rather than letting it flow out of the characters as they themselves experience it. Your key charaters are Dual and Phoenix and I'd like to see and feel more through their senses, thoughts, and emotions. They're an interesting pair you've created.
If you don't mind a suggestion, you might even let a lot of your scenes go longer, as long as they're flowing smoothly. Some of the scenes felt a touch hasty, as though you were pushing the info out fast and terse rather than letting it flow out of the characters as they themselves experience it. Your key charaters are Dual and Phoenix and I'd like to see and feel more through their senses, thoughts, and emotions. They're an interesting pair you've created.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 01 September 2004 21:04
You've got a knack for dialogue. I wanted just a little more development of the characters. It would be great if you could "show" a little more and "tell" a little less. Let the characters actions and words speak for them instead of just telling us exactly how they feel. Just a thought. I could be wrong- I'm more of a reader than a writer. Keep writing. I dig this shite.
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Saturday, 16 October 2004 10:04
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Saturday, 16 October 2004 10:14
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Saturday, 16 October 2004 10:18
<%
'--------------------------------------------------------------
' ASPBlackJack v1.0
' (x) Ugh!! 2000 - 15/10/2000
'
' Converted to ASP from JScript obtained at
' http://www.javascriptsearch.com/scripts/Games/blackjack.html
' Original author: Unknown
'
' Written for http://www.only-network.com/games Any comments,
' flames, requests, postcards etc to owen@cutajar.net
'--------------------------------------------------------------
Option Explicit
'------------------------------------------------
' History Routines
'------------------------------------------------
sub ClearHistory
Dim q
For q = 1 to 10
Session("DHistory" & q) = ""
Session("UHistory" & q) = ""
next
end sub
sub WriteHistory(Entity,Message)
Dim q
q = 1
While Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q) <> ""
q = q + 1
Wend
Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q) = Message
end sub
Function ReadHistory(Entity)
Dim returnValue,q,currentmessage
returnvalue = ""
for q = 1 to 10
currentmessage = Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q)
If currentmessage <> "" Then
returnvalue = returnvalue & "- " & currentmessage & "<br>"
end if
next
ReadHistory = returnValue
end Function
'------------------------------------------------
' Select a random card
'------------------------------------------------
function pickCard()
Dim iRandom
Randomize()
iRandom = Int(13 * Rnd + 1)
pickCard = iRandom
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Select a random suit
'------------------------------------------------
function pickSuit()
Dim iRandom
Randomize()
iRandom = Int(4 * Rnd + 1)
if iRandom = 1 then
pickSuit = "Spades"
elseif iRandom = 2 then
pickSuit = "Clubs"
elseif iRandom = 3 then
pickSuit = "Diamonds"
else
pickSuit = "Hearts"
end if
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Translate card number to words
'------------------------------------------------
function cardName(card)
if card = 1 then
cardName = "Ace"
elseif card = 11 then
cardName = "Jack"
elseif card = 12 then
cardName = "Queen"
elseif card = 13 then
cardName = "King"
else
cardName = card
end if
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Work out value of card
'------------------------------------------------
function cardValue(card)
if card = 1 then
cardValue = 11
elseif card > 10 Then
cardValue = 10
else
cardValue = card
end if
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Work out value of card
'------------------------------------------------
function selectCard(strWho)
Dim iCardNum,theCard
iCardNum = pickCard
theCard = CardName(iCardNum) & " of " & pickSuit
Response.Write strWho & " picked a " & theCard & "<br>"
selectCard = CardValue(iCardNum)
WriteHistory strWho , theCard
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Show current status on screen
'------------------------------------------------
sub ReportStatus
Response.Write "<p>"
Response.Write "<table border=3><tr><td>Player</td><td>Hand</td><td>Score</td></tr>"
Response.Write "<tr><td>You</td><td>" & ReadHistory("User") & "</td>"
Response.Write "<td>" & Session("User") & "</td></tr>"
Response.Write "<tr><td>Dealer</td><td>" & ReadHistory("Dealer") & "</td>"
Response.Write "<td>" & Session("Dealer") & "</td></tr></table>"
end sub
'------------------------------------------------
' Work out value of card
'------------------------------------------------
sub NewHand
ClearHistory
Session("Dealer") = 0
Session("User") = 0
Session("Dealer") = Session("Dealer") + SelectCard("Dealer")
Session("User") = Session("User") + SelectCard("User")
Session("GameOver") = False
ReportStatus
end Sub
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' Dealer Move
'--------------------------------------------
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' ASPBlackJack v1.0
' (x) Ugh!! 2000 - 15/10/2000
'
' Converted to ASP from JScript obtained at
' http://www.javascriptsearch.com/scripts/Games/blackjack.html
' Original author: Unknown
'
' Written for http://www.only-network.com/games Any comments,
' flames, requests, postcards etc to owen@cutajar.net
'--------------------------------------------------------------
Option Explicit
'------------------------------------------------
' History Routines
'------------------------------------------------
sub ClearHistory
Dim q
For q = 1 to 10
Session("DHistory" & q) = ""
Session("UHistory" & q) = ""
next
end sub
sub WriteHistory(Entity,Message)
Dim q
q = 1
While Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q) <> ""
q = q + 1
Wend
Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q) = Message
end sub
Function ReadHistory(Entity)
Dim returnValue,q,currentmessage
returnvalue = ""
for q = 1 to 10
currentmessage = Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q)
If currentmessage <> "" Then
returnvalue = returnvalue & "- " & currentmessage & "<br>"
end if
next
ReadHistory = returnValue
end Function
'------------------------------------------------
' Select a random card
'------------------------------------------------
function pickCard()
Dim iRandom
Randomize()
iRandom = Int(13 * Rnd + 1)
pickCard = iRandom
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Select a random suit
'------------------------------------------------
function pickSuit()
Dim iRandom
Randomize()
iRandom = Int(4 * Rnd + 1)
if iRandom = 1 then
pickSuit = "Spades"
elseif iRandom = 2 then
pickSuit = "Clubs"
elseif iRandom = 3 then
pickSuit = "Diamonds"
else
pickSuit = "Hearts"
end if
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Translate card number to words
'------------------------------------------------
function cardName(card)
if card = 1 then
cardName = "Ace"
elseif card = 11 then
cardName = "Jack"
elseif card = 12 then
cardName = "Queen"
elseif card = 13 then
cardName = "King"
else
cardName = card
end if
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Work out value of card
'------------------------------------------------
function cardValue(card)
if card = 1 then
cardValue = 11
elseif card > 10 Then
cardValue = 10
else
cardValue = card
end if
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Work out value of card
'------------------------------------------------
function selectCard(strWho)
Dim iCardNum,theCard
iCardNum = pickCard
theCard = CardName(iCardNum) & " of " & pickSuit
Response.Write strWho & " picked a " & theCard & "<br>"
selectCard = CardValue(iCardNum)
WriteHistory strWho , theCard
end function
'------------------------------------------------
' Show current status on screen
'------------------------------------------------
sub ReportStatus
Response.Write "<p>"
Response.Write "<table border=3><tr><td>Player</td><td>Hand</td><td>Score</td></tr>"
Response.Write "<tr><td>You</td><td>" & ReadHistory("User") & "</td>"
Response.Write "<td>" & Session("User") & "</td></tr>"
Response.Write "<tr><td>Dealer</td><td>" & ReadHistory("Dealer") & "</td>"
Response.Write "<td>" & Session("Dealer") & "</td></tr></table>"
end sub
'------------------------------------------------
' Work out value of card
'------------------------------------------------
sub NewHand
ClearHistory
Session("Dealer") = 0
Session("User") = 0
Session("Dealer") = Session("Dealer") + SelectCard("Dealer")
Session("User") = Session("User") + SelectCard("User")
Session("GameOver") = False
ReportStatus
end Sub
'------------------------------------------------
' Dealer Move
'--------------------------------------------
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 16 October 2004 10:20
Option Explicit
sub ClearHistory
Dim q
For q = 1 to 10
Session("DHistory" & q) = ""
Session("UHistory" & q) = ""
next
end sub
sub WriteHistory(Entity,Message)
Dim q
q = 1
While Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q) <> ""
q = q + 1
Wend
Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q) = Message
end sub
Function ReadHistory(Entity)
Dim returnValue,q,currentmessage
returnvalue = ""
for q = 1 to 10
currentmessage = Session( Left(Entity,1) & "History" & q)
If currentmessage <> "" Then
returnvalue = returnvalue & "- " & currentmessage & "<br>"
end if
next
ReadHistory = returnValue
end Function
function pickCard()
Dim iRandom
Randomize()
iRandom = Int(13 * Rnd + 1)
pickCard = iRandom
end function
function pickSuit()
Dim iRandom
Randomize()
iRandom = Int(4 * Rnd + 1)
if iRandom = 1 then
pickSuit = "Spades"
elseif iRandom = 2 then
pickSuit = "Clubs"
elseif iRandom = 3 then
pickSuit = "Diamonds"
else
pickSuit = "Hearts"
end if
end function
function cardName(card)
if card = 1 then
cardName = "Ace"
elseif card = 11 then
cardName = "Jack"
elseif card = 12 then
cardName = "Queen"
elseif card = 13 then
cardName = "King"
else
cardName = card
end if
end function
function cardValue(card)
if card = 1 then
cardValue = 11
elseif card > 10 Then
cardValue = 10
else
cardValue = card
end if
end function
function selectCard(strWho)
Dim iCardNum,theCard
iCardNum = pickCard
theCard = CardName(iCardNum) & " of " & pickSuit
Response.Write strWho & " picked a " & theCard & "<br>"
selectCard = CardValue(iCardNum)
WriteHistory strWho , theCard
end function
sub ReportStatus
Response.Write "<p>"
Response.Write "<table border=3><tr><td>Player</td><td>Hand</td><td>Score</td></tr>"
Response.Write "<tr><td>You</td><td>" & ReadHistory("User") & "</td>"
Response.Write "<td>" & Session("User") & "</td></tr>"
Response.Write "<tr><td>Dealer</td><td>" & ReadHistory("Dealer") & "</td>"
Response.Write "<td>" & Session("Dealer") & "</td></tr></table>"
end sub
sub NewHand
ClearHistory
Session("Dealer") = 0
Session("User") = 0
Session("Dealer") = Session("Dealer") + SelectCard("Dealer")
Session("User") = Session("User") + SelectCard("User")
Session("GameOver") = False
ReportStatus
end Sub
sub DealerMove
while Session("Dealer") < 17
Session("Dealer") = Session("Dealer") + SelectCard("Dealer")
wend
ReportStatus
end sub
sub UserMove
Session("User") = Session("User") + SelectCard("User")
if Session("User") > 21 Then
Response.Write "<h2>You busted!</h2>"
Session("GameOver") = True
end if
ReportStatus
end sub
Sub LookAtHands
if Session("Dealer") > 21 Then
Response.Write "<h2>House busts! You win!</H2>"
elseif Session("User") > Session("Dealer") Then
Response.Write "<h2>You win</H2>"
elseif Session("User") = Session("Dealer") Then
Response.Write "<h2>Push!</H2>"
else
Response.Write "<h2>House wins!</H2>"
end if
Session("GameOver") = True
End Sub
' Maincode starts here
Dim action
Response.Write "<center>"
action = Request("action") & ""
If action = "Hit Me" Then
UserMove
Elseif action = "Stand" Then
DealerMove
LookAtHands
Else
NewHand
End If
Response.Write "<form action=blacksource.asp>"
If Session("GameOver") <> True Then
Response.Write "<INPUT TYPE=SUBMIT NAME=action VALUE='Hit Me'>"
Response.Write "<INPUT TYPE=SUBMIT NAME=action VALUE='Stand'>"
End if
Response.Write "<INPUT TYPE=SUBMIT NAME=action VALUE='New Hand'>"
Response.Write "</FORM>"
Response.Write "</center>"
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