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Drive--(Chapter One)

Thursday, June 21, 2007

Some time has passed since the incident on Miranda. The crew is struggling with the loss of their friends and trying to maintain good business relations to keep Serenity in the air.

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Drive

Chapter One – “Picking Up The Pieces”

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Serenity dipped into a barrel roll as a rad-missile passed within inches of the hull. Explosions sent all colors of light through the bridge. It was a sight that could cast fear and awe at the same moment.

“I remember this.” Mal said to himself. “We thought it was just a shiny gold coin. They thought it was a gift from their god. They didn’t take kindly to its disappearance.”

“Woah.” Wash whipped the controls to the right to avoid another missile. After leveling out, he quickly wiped the sweat from his brow. “Barely dodged death that time, Cap.”

Mal laughed and gripped the railing a bit harder. “They must have chased us for hours until you lost them in that asteroid field. Quite a sight to behold.” He looked over to Wash, who was still struggling with the controls. “You were the best pilot I ever laid eyes on.”

“Thanks, Mal. You don’t have to suck up to me, I don’t want to die here either.”

“I know, Wash…” A serious frown overcame Mal’s look of pride. “You didn’t die here…but you did.”

Wash looked up briefly. “What are you talking about?” He had that quizzing smile that he was so famous for.

“You died down there on that planet, Wash.” Tears formed under his eyes. “I’m sorry. Ain’t a day that goes by when I’m not.”

“Mal, now’s not the time to go all crazy on me. I…” Wash looked out the front viewport stunned. “Oh…that’s right…I did…” A Reaver spike ripped through the bridge and impaled Wash through the chest.

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“噢, 上帝原谅我!!!” Captain Malcolm Reynolds awoke in his bunk with a loss of breath. He quickly scanned his surroundings and calmed himself down. “Just a dream…Just a horrible, guilt-ridden dream.” After his breath returned, he went about getting dressed.

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“I’m not blaming you, Jayne. All’s I wanted to know is why there was a mark-II blaster in the air-comp manifold. Nearly ripped half of it apart when it kicked on.” Kaylee had her arms crossed in the usual manner when something goes w

Comments
Thursday, 21 June 2007 09:50
Oddly enough I feel that I have read this once before a while back, have you posted this story elsewhere? Perhaps on Fanfiction.net? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 21 June 2007 10:04
Knightfall1138, no it isn't against the rules to post a story in more than one place just recognised it and bugged me where from. Thanks for clarifying by email. Carry on and post the rest of it here, I am sure you will get a good response. This is a very good crowd but then they would be, we are all loyal Browncoats. Also, you may be tempted to post some new stuff as well. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 21 June 2007 18:46
Jayne witrh a rocket launcher in Inara's shuttle -- bwahahahaha! That was priceless. Nice setup, too. Typo-wise, might wanna change "straights" to "straits" as in the Straits of Gibraltar, Hormuz, et al. And might wanna change "pin-up" to "pent-up". Other than that, you got the "voices" spot-on, especiialy Mal. Also like how you've got the actual chinese posted in there. Keep up the great work.
--MAG
Saturday, 23 June 2007 13:28
Very interesting storyline here. You've done a great job at bringing all the characters to life. I especially liked the way you expressed Mal's guilt about Wash. Love Jayne's attitude about defending the ship at all costs!
Tuesday, 26 June 2007 01:22
Oh...don't tell me the crew's gonna nab the Dodge Challenger Alex Tully drove in "Drive?!" Cuz that's just nucking futs!

;D

Some awesome work here, Knightfall1138! Definitely can't wait to see how you have things unfold:D

BEB

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