Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

A Lost Art - Part 1

Saturday, June 2, 2007

Post-BDM; A letter or two (or five) were sent out from Serenity's crew and suddenly, they seem to find themselves in danger. It's all Joss's characters and 'verse, i'm just borrowing it for a spell.

Forgive me, folks, this is the longest fic i've written to date...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3320    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The sick sound of bone popping forced Inara's eyes to open.

Mal's sound of pain turned into a shout of anger before three gunshots echoed in the small room. Inara tried to move, to roll over to see who had fired the weapon, to get up to help Mal, to do anything , but her limbs were sluggish and unwilling to respond. A body dropped into her line of vision, blood bubbling out of what was left of a man's face. She pushed away with a cry, her side screaming in outraged agony. Mal was there suddenly, helping her to roll onto her back, his words a litany of promises she wasn't sure he knew he was making. She glanced back at the dying mess behind Mal and gagged.

"No, no, no," he instructed, using his left hand to gently nudge her chin. "Don't look at that, you just focus on my eyes, you understand me?"

She nodded, swallowing thickly. His right arm hung at an odd angle and there was evidence of the fight blossoming across his face. He did everything one-handed as he worked to staunch the bleeding from her own wound.

"Hold here," he instructed, his hand pushing her own hand against a warm makeshift bandage. She wondered vaguely which part of her skirt was now missing a large patch of fabric as Mal pushed away from the floor to stagger to the shuttle's consul.

"River, you there?"

She heard the slight edge of panic in his voice. Inara stared at the dead eyes on the floor next to her. The air was thick with a smell she prayed she would never remember. She closed her eyes and turned her face away. The bandage in her hand was getting warmer and sticky.

"Mal?" she called, her voice shaky.

"River, answer me!"

The fabric was slipping from her sticky fingers. Her side felt warm on the wrong side of her skin.

"Mal?"

"RIVER!"

***

Dear Parental Authority Figures,

By now, you must have heard that your fugitive children (Simon and River, chronologically ordered) have been removed from the Alliance's Most Wanted Censored Individuals List. It is not for lack of trying. T

Comments
Saturday, 02 June 2007 04:56
Talk about potential and all kinds of tension. How precisely did Mal and Co. get into this predicament?

I really loved River's letter because it was so formal. Plus the "mind-reading genius of outrageous proportions" is an inspired description. I am very worried about Inara and Mal though - neither of them seems to be in good shape and if Simon's down for the count ... yikes!
Saturday, 02 June 2007 05:09
hey! this...this is gonna get good... can't wait 4 d next part! :)
Saturday, 02 June 2007 09:57
Would I be right in thinking River's letter started off this bout of murderous mayhem? If so, are their parents behind this or did the letter get intercepted and men get sent to take them all out? It certainly is a bad time for the doctor to be out for the count and oddly enough I did smile at Jayne's comment when he wondered if the stitches would be straight. And why were Inara and Mal on their own in her shuttle away from Serenity? The plot thickens. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 02 June 2007 12:05
Well, you certainly started this off with a bang! Very exciting and looking forward to more. Great use of humor and understatement to get your action across.
Saturday, 02 June 2007 13:26
Lots of potential in this story> Loved the letter, it's so like River.
Saturday, 02 June 2007 18:14
Nice start. I liked the formality of River's letter. I fear, though, that it will be intercepted . . .
Sunday, 03 June 2007 03:33
Definitely some mighty fabulous work here, kacidilla! Really laughed my ass off at River's letter to her parents, especially at the part where she bluntly explains that the effort of trying to out-think her being a total waste of time:D

Gotta say though...I REALLY wanna know how things came to where they were by the end of this chapter! Cuz dropping a bomb like that is just not cricket!

;)

BEB
Sunday, 03 June 2007 17:42
This is an AMAZING beginning! Wow, I love how you threw us straight into the thick of things, it really works at catching attention and making me want to find out more!

River's letter was perfect, by the way.

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