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BDH - As it should have been - Prologue

Thursday, May 31, 2007

Three months after Miranda, Serenity needs another crewmember, and another job.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1415    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Introduction:

Welcome to Big Damn Heroes: As it should have been. My first fanfic, Big Damn Heroes, has been deleted and discontinued due to a horrific lack of proper planning and writing sense on my part. In the months since the discontinuation of my original story I have attempted to improve my writing style. I have also been able to see all of the Firefly episodes, and thus, I believe I now have a better understanding of the characters I'm dealing with.

The original idea of the story is the same, as are some of the scenes and plot twists, but most (if not all) of the writing will be new. I hope you enjoy it, and please do continue to give me constructive criticism.

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Prologue

Jayne was the last one to reach the lounge, and it was obvious that he wasn't happy about being there. His complaints could be heard, though not understood, just above his breath.

"Thank you for fitting us into your schedule, Jayne." Mal scoffed, and then continued. "Alright everyone, we're gonna be landing on Beaumonde within in the hour. Jayne, Zoe, and I are going to look for a job. Kaylee, you can take Simon shopping for parts and food. Inara, you can do whatever you like, long as you're back on the boat by sunset. And River, get on the Cortex. Send word out that we're hiring."

The room had been relatively relaxed up until that point. Now the tension could have been cut with a knife.

Jayne, who had hardly been paying attention straightened up, "Say what?"

Zoe stared hard at the captain, "Sir, I believe that, for once, Jayne speaks for us all."

Mal cleared his throat. "We're short handed. You're all doin' a fine job right now, but we're gonna need at least one more man 'round here when things get rough again."

"You think they will?" asked Kaylee, "Get rough again, I mean."

Simon put her arm around her.

Zoe snorted, "That's pretty much guaranteed. Only question is, how rough?"

Simon spoke his peace, "Well, I can see things being at least somewhat calmer for now, since the warrants for all

Comments
Thursday, 31 May 2007 21:40
Not a bad start, felt it was a bit short though. Just as I started to truely get into it, it ended. It was a pretty decent set up.

Look forward to see the next chapter.
IAMTHEZ
Thursday, 31 May 2007 23:22
Meh, it's just the prologue... real chapters will be much, much longer...
Friday, 01 June 2007 02:26
Nice start, I say. Introduced some new characters, and brought up some old faces. Dialogue was nice all around. So, what's the anual dues for Fallen Sun? Just curious...

Looking forward to the next chapter.


Rob O.
Friday, 01 June 2007 03:31
Hmmm...I think Ath is advocating this only as a way to get revenge on Mal for the swordfight and losing Inara. Good opening; I hope you have something really nasty in mind for ol' Ath...preferably delivered by Mal! Something that will bring him down a peg or three permanently? I'd like to see him groveling in front of Mal for a bit!
Friday, 01 June 2007 22:24
Interesting to know Mal's victory over him and Inara's influence in getting him blacklisted haven't dampened dear ol' Ath's business powers. Really gotta wonder what he's got up his sleeve though:S

Still...great start here, iamthez:D

BEB

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