Blue Sun Room FICTION - SUSPENSE

Orphaned Soul, Part 4

Tuesday, August 3, 2004

Inara and Shephard Book try to help a troubled girl who has lost her brother, and perhaps her mind.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4835    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“There!” Book said, pointing at the shuttle’s navigational display. “They’re right on top of us!”

As Book attempted to get a visual through the cockpit windows, Inara was already cycling open the shuttle’s airlock door. Squinting up into the sky, what she saw choked her with despair. Serenity was being dogged by a Reaver ship. And they were gaining on her.

Book appeared next to her, and cursed as he surveyed Serenity’s tactical situation. It was hopeless. Despite her pilot’s clear skill, the Reaver ship was simply faster. As they watched in horror, the trailing ship fired its large magnetic grappler, catching Serenity amidship as she spun sideways in a desperate attempt to change course. Serenity was being dragged to her doom.

“They better not wait much longer to take off in the other shuttle…”

Inara did not reply, knowing that Mal would never leave Serenity. Unlike her. Unreasoned guilt threatened to tear away her last threads of control.

Just as the massive Reaver ship collided violently with Serenity, shuttle two finally detached, fleeing the fused ships. But as it attempted to bank away, the twisted metal chimera suddenly lurched into a barrelroll, striking the smaller shuttle and sending it careening off course.

Inara gasped.

As the two larger ships wrestled in the Reavers’ death-grip, shuttle two fell gracelessly towards earth. Seconds before impact, the pilot was able to pull the shuttle out of its nosedive into a scarcely controlled crash landing, just beyond the next ridge.

“There may be survivors,” Book said as he made his way back into the shuttle, heading for the cockpit.

Inara watched, frozen, as Serenity and the Reaver ship descended in their death-spiral toward the horizon. The setting sun flared through her tears, mercif

Comments
Wednesday, 04 August 2004 00:55
You are the master of the cliff-hanger!

Shiny, Shiny! :-)
Wednesday, 04 August 2004 01:39
Ooooo! Ahhhhhh! :)
Wednesday, 04 August 2004 06:46
Ow! Not sure how I'll cope if you've killed off Mal. Seems all our friends in a very dark and dire place right now. Ali D :~)
Breathe, gorrammit, breathe!
Wednesday, 04 August 2004 14:52
You keep givin' me a reason to come back for more!!!
Wednesday, 04 August 2004 16:37
Good golly! You created a very strong, well done, visual of the Serenity/Reaver ship encounter with very concise writing. And suspenseful.

I've very intrigued by this series you created and you've left me wanting more! Thanks for sharing. Wish the sections were a bit longer.
Thursday, 05 August 2004 01:44
Guild sister -- thanks for your feedback! Sorry these sections are so short; as I mentioned in my post, this is my first time writing fan fic (or *any* fiction, for that matter). I hope you can bear with me while I work out the kinks. :)
Thursday, 05 August 2004 01:46
AMDOBELL -- Don’t worry, things will get better…

Part 5 is posted: http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=1671
Tuesday, 25 January 2005 18:54
Whoah... That was intense!

I have to agree with GuildSister. The description of the Reaver ship encounter was detailed and exciting.

Great cliffhanger too! Moving on to part 5!

Keep up the shiny work!

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